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Offline wakarimasen

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Re: Punctuation and text messages (in fiction)
« Reply #15 on: September 18, 2015, 12:42:59 PM »
I would go with the whole left side/ right side thing. Don't have any user names or anything (after all you only ever have two participants). perhaps have it in italics. Keep all grammar unless you are trying to evoke an image of an older phone.
Always start of the left hand side with whoever you've led into the conversation piece. Something like;

Spoiler for Hiden:
It took a moment for him to realise the phone had vibrated in his pocket, he scrambled the old, rubberised brick out. Herman had had texted him the flight details.

He's coming in on BA101. Don't
let him past you.

                                                         R U kidding?
Just saying. Be sharp. We
only have one shot at this.

                                                         just U B ready

He stuffed the phone back into his jacket and focused on the brightly lit exit.


Offline ClintACK

Re: Punctuation and text messages (in fiction)
« Reply #16 on: September 18, 2015, 07:01:13 PM »
I would go with the whole left side/ right side thing. Don't have any user names or anything (after all you only ever have two participants). perhaps have it in italics. Keep all grammar unless you are trying to evoke an image of an older phone.

Had to laugh at the bolded bit, because I just wrote a scene a couple of days ago where my PoV char is sitting on public transit having two very different text conversations at the same time.  Lots of fun things you can do with that.

I agree the left-right formatting (or text boxes) definitely reads as texting or instant messaging organically, but I still hate losing the "beats" and mental reaction text that I can get in classic dialogue format.  (For now, I'm just writing, but when I get to revisions I'm going to really have to figure this out.)  The left-right formatting seems like it would work much better in a more distant 3rd-omni or 3rd-cinematic, but the story I'm writing now needs tight 3rd-limited, very in the PoV's head.