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Title: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on August 04, 2020, 09:44:40 AM
It's time to vote on the July Writing Contest: "Old Man's Tale"

This time we got 5 entries - thanks to all who participated!

Please read through all of the entries in the submission thread and place your votes for your favourite entry in this thread. You won't be able to see the vote breakdown until the vote closes, so spread the word for others to come and vote! We do ask that if you entered, to vote for someone else.

The key for the numbers of votes is this: 1-5 entries: 1 vote, 6-10 entries: 2 votes, 11-15 entries: 3 votes, 16-19: 4 votes, 20-25: 5 votes, 26+: 6 votes

Remember that the winning entry will be posted on the main Fantasy-Faction site in a few months (I'm still hopeful of getting the access to do this...)

Good luck to all our entrants and thank you for taking the time to read the stories and vote! :)

(still) NEW FEATURE: note that the voting deadline is now the 23rd August, which will leave the last week of the month for feedback/critique availability.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Nora on August 04, 2020, 02:03:14 PM
Voted! I would have liked to have two on this one, as the one I could have, but didn't pick, deserves the encouragement, but it's hard to make it my first choice.

Good work @Kindly for your first story!
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on August 04, 2020, 02:10:35 PM
Voted! I would have liked to have two on this one
We only needed ONE more story *looks pointedly at usual participants that didn't enter this time*
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Nora on August 04, 2020, 02:15:03 PM
Voted! I would have liked to have two on this one
We only needed ONE more story *looks pointedly at usual participants that didn't enter this time*

Pretty rare and unexpected already that I'm not on the receiving end of that glare. I'm very happy I made it this month, this story existed in stubs (the intro, and a chunk later on) but had no drive or point, so adding 1k words to it and making it a whole story was satisfying.
The other idea I worked 500 words on followed a woman walking through a forest in the afterlife, reaching the god she'd selected before death for the judgement of her soul, and proceeding to tell him her life's story. It was supposed to have a big emotional twist, but I didn't manage to make it dynamic. It was just a ton of tell and little show. Maybe I can recycle the idea for the new dialogue topic though.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Jake Baelish on August 06, 2020, 06:32:59 AM
Voted. One of the toughest choices in a while. Some really brilliant stories  :)
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Kindly on August 09, 2020, 05:18:18 PM
Voted! I liked all entries, and thought the one I voted for was really quite outstanding.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Caith on August 17, 2020, 09:16:53 AM
Voted. I could easily have voted for all of these, though. A tough month to choose one.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on August 18, 2020, 06:11:09 PM
Voted, and again I could have chosen any of 3... thanks for making my decision hard ;D

6 votes so far, note that there's less than a week, anything can happen!
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Alex Hormann on August 18, 2020, 06:33:28 PM
Voted.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on August 22, 2020, 08:15:46 PM
Voting ends tomorrow morning, it's very close, there's still time!!
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Lady Ty on August 23, 2020, 12:38:02 AM
Just made it in time to vote. Thank you all for good stories :D
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on August 23, 2020, 11:34:19 AM
Congratulations @Kindly , first time entry is a win :D
I hope you become a regular!

I really liked your story but ended up voting for @Caith , I just felt it a bit more.
And I've already told @Nora how her story touched me, even though it's completely out of my comfort zone hehe
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Kindly on August 23, 2020, 12:05:46 PM
Wow, thank you! I'm not sure how this happened, but it's made me very happy indeed. :)
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Kindly on August 23, 2020, 12:07:38 PM
I liked all entries, but really loved Nora's. The main character will stay with me a long time.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Nora on August 23, 2020, 01:10:00 PM
I liked all entries, but really loved Nora's. The main character will stay with me a long time.

Aw, that awesome thanks! I voted for yours! I really enjoyed the fact it reminded me of the old mother in Huxley's Brave New World, living in a reserve and being one of the last to have given birth naturally. Also enjoyed the fact the twist of what actually happened was the old lady taking on the lie for the sake of a child. This could/should have been explored better imo, for example : maybe in a society where aging simply isn't en vogue anymore, carrying the weight of someone's death might be an even larger stigma? As it is I don't think it would have mattered really if people knew it was the kid's fault. IIRC it's the guy's fault for doing stupid risky stuff to begin with :-p
But I enjoyed it because I was able to do my own mental maths and fill in the world as I read on.

Definitely areas you can progress on, but for a first entry it was really good, what worked best imo was how well contained the short story was.

So yes, congrats and well deserved win!

My vote almooooooost went for Alex's poem, but I still can't make myself like one more than a good prose story. I definitely enjoyed it though, I liked the conjured images and idea, and it wasn't pretentious.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Alex Hormann on August 23, 2020, 03:16:40 PM

My vote almooooooost went for Alex's poem, but I still can't make myself like one more than a good prose story. I definitely enjoyed it though, I liked the conjured images and idea, and it wasn't pretentious.

Thanks.  :) I wasn't expecting any votes, but had fun writing it.

I voted for @Jake Baelish
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Lady Ty on August 24, 2020, 07:16:01 AM
@Alex Hormann , I thoroughly enjoyed your poem, as I can relate to all those thoughts and feelings, you have understanding beyond your years. But  despite how much I would love to write of the wonder, happiness & heartache in my long life which spins around in my head,  somehow  at this stage the energy is missing. Appreciate and thank you for your writing but my final choice went to @Nora

Nora  Glad to see you writing here again, I loved the originality and details in the setting and above all  the empathy of The Teacher.  :D

@Kindly  Many congratulations on your win, it is unusual for a first entry. Made me think - could I bear to go back and have all those years again ? Answer no, despite the health benefits, content with my wrinkles and the life I have lived. Look forward to reading more of your stories in the future.  ;D
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: xiagan on August 24, 2020, 12:55:30 PM
Congrats, Kindly! Don't let any pressure build from the fact you won with your first entry. ;)
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Nora on August 24, 2020, 02:09:45 PM
Aww thanks @Lady Ty !!! I'm glad to be back too... I've decided to apply this brand new way of tackling the hobbies I don't feel like doing but still want to practice : Just set tim in the day where it's "that hobby time" and do it no matter how inspired you feel.

Definitely been working for 3D, which tends to be tedious work anyway and just needs the hours being put in, but writing... well, I'm surprised I managed to make teacher out of such a system.

Will do my best to seduce you again this month... As soon as I get to writing.
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Jake Baelish on August 26, 2020, 10:48:56 AM
Congrats on winning your first contest Kindly!
I could easily have gone any which way with my vote but ended up voting for Caith (3rd time in a row, guess I like your style, will miss you not posting this month  ;D ),
Title: Re: [JUL 2020] - Old Man's Tale - Voting Thread
Post by: Kindly on August 26, 2020, 06:02:23 PM
I liked all entries, but really loved Nora's. The main character will stay with me a long time.

Aw, that awesome thanks! I voted for yours! I really enjoyed the fact it reminded me of the old mother in Huxley's Brave New World, living in a reserve and being one of the last to have given birth naturally. Also enjoyed the fact the twist of what actually happened was the old lady taking on the lie for the sake of a child. This could/should have been explored better imo, for example : maybe in a society where aging simply isn't en vogue anymore, carrying the weight of someone's death might be an even larger stigma? As it is I don't think it would have mattered really if people knew it was the kid's fault. IIRC it's the guy's fault for doing stupid risky stuff to begin with :-p
But I enjoyed it because I was able to do my own mental maths and fill in the world as I read on.

Definitely areas you can progress on, but for a first entry it was really good, what worked best imo was how well contained the short story was.

So yes, congrats and well deserved win!


Thank you! I really appreciate the feedback too. Adding a bit of an extra taboo on taking a life would have helped quite a bit, I think. As it was, I knew there was a problem, that the conflict wasn't as large as the characters made it out to be, but I couldn't figure out a way to fix it.

This contest was fun!