Gah, I am still computer-less so I haven't managed to re-read these yet. I shall try to slyly catch up at work today, a mission that will take all my cunning and guile.
And thank you Nora, you've made my day. I reckon that was the best thing I wrote all year last year. Maybe flash fiction should be my thing.
Well, you've got quite the talent for the sad and gritty and gruesome. I say that thinking of your "narrative Friction" short, which I really liked as well, and I'll be sore next year when it's not on the 2016 story poll.
On the short fiction one, you've made an amazing job of giving a setting without a line of description, making a character through some funny lines but mostly sad events - forgotten, uncared for, and suffering the last blow of losing his enemy, the only person left not in his employ who would have cared - and as the end came I thought it'd be a funny line, or just a sad one, but the way the count is just all so serious "it should have been me!" is brilliant, because it makes it all real. If it had been a funny line, as the exposed chicken bone sort of prepared me for, it would have been less.
As it is you've created a character that's deep into how own story and it's quite emotional for us to see him going through this. It's one of the stories that marked me the most this year.
When I say you have a talent for that, it's because it's the same feeling I had in your 4th wall story. Sad but read with a grin on my face, until the end comes, and then it goes right down dark, and I was exactly like that :

Though I do not have a moustache.
You're great at balancing humour and darkness, and the serious endings kinda make me reconsider why I was grinning, for each stories.
So yeah, get yourself a new computer presto and start participating more, I want to read more from you
@OnlyOneHighlander