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Author Topic: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)  (Read 1049936 times)

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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11730 on: June 05, 2019, 07:55:30 AM »
I just don't know how to write any other way, so I'm sticking to it.
I know you've been around long enough to do this if you wanted, but a way to change could be to enter our monthly contest and then ask for critique. Aren't you ever tempted to do this?

In your books I've read I think you had the right balance between showing and telling, but I'm not a writer. Is the new one very different?
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11731 on: June 05, 2019, 09:17:50 AM »
I'm no writer,but when I was researching on how to write I recall below tips.

1. Write the scene as it's happening in real time.
2. Just a hint of emotion. No emotional descriptions.
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11732 on: June 06, 2019, 09:39:20 AM »
Eli, why do coffee shops close at 6pm in Reykjavik? Very strange esp in a tourist area. Restaurants and pretty much the Whole city seems shut by 9 too.
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11733 on: June 06, 2019, 11:37:34 AM »
Eli, why do coffee shops close at 6pm in Reykjavik? Very strange esp in a tourist area. Restaurants and pretty much the Whole city seems shut by 9 too.

I hardly ever set foot in Reykjavík, so I can't really answer that.
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11734 on: June 06, 2019, 12:21:25 PM »
Happens in Brighton too, which threw me off as its pretty touristy. Guess they make enough money during the day that they don't have to stay open late.


Eli - sucks on the rejection. It's a rough market these days for those with a talky style. But clearly you're very close.
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11735 on: June 06, 2019, 09:42:46 PM »
Eli, why do coffee shops close at 6pm in Reykjavik? Very strange esp in a tourist area. Restaurants and pretty much the Whole city seems shut by 9 too.

I hardly ever set foot in Reykjavík, so I can't really answer that.

I'm in Myvatn now and Akureyri tomorrow. Place looks fabulous. And more restaurant's open late too.
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11736 on: June 07, 2019, 12:25:45 AM »
Eli, why do coffee shops close at 6pm in Reykjavik? Very strange esp in a tourist area. Restaurants and pretty much the Whole city seems shut by 9 too.

I hardly ever set foot in Reykjavík, so I can't really answer that.

I'm in Myvatn now and Akureyri tomorrow. Place looks fabulous. And more restaurant's open late too.

Hm. You know, I AM going out for drinks tomorrow... :)
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11737 on: June 07, 2019, 08:16:34 AM »
^ Yay, Fantasy Faction meet! ;D
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11738 on: June 07, 2019, 08:29:57 AM »
Sadly it's been a hectic trip. Am driving past Akureyri and into Hvammstangi today seeing sights along the way. Would have been nice to have a chat!

PS: if you need me make a drive by and yell abuse at your agents house/office, just say so.  8)
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11739 on: June 07, 2019, 01:43:49 PM »
Sadly it's been a hectic trip. Am driving past Akureyri and into Hvammstangi today seeing sights along the way. Would have been nice to have a chat!

PS: if you need me make a drive by and yell abuse at your agents house/office, just say so.  8)

Well, I'm seeking agents abroad.
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Offline S. K. Inkslinger

Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11740 on: June 08, 2019, 04:47:14 AM »
Never give up hope Eli! This may sounded trite and you've probably heard it a thousand times, but J. K. Rowling got rejected more than a dozen times too. Anyway, good luck on writing and further submitting your stories.

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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11741 on: June 10, 2019, 09:42:49 PM »
Why is it winter again? >:(
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11742 on: June 10, 2019, 10:38:46 PM »
Bea you have lived here long enough to know May is often hot and dry, June often cold, wet & windy. If we are really unlucky we could have flooding in July.

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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11743 on: June 10, 2019, 11:35:11 PM »
Bea you have lived here long enough to know May is often hot and dry, June often cold, wet & windy. If we are really unlucky we could have flooding in July.

There is an old photo of myself as a kid, downtown at the June 17th Icelandic independence day celebration. I'm wearing a jacket and a wool cap because it was snowing a bit.
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Re: The King's Paws (with one holding a bottle of Peri Peri sauce.)
« Reply #11744 on: June 11, 2019, 08:06:53 AM »
Bea you have lived here long enough to know May is often hot and dry, June often cold, wet & windy. If we are really unlucky we could have flooding in July.
Not always... and I tend to forget one year to the next ;D
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