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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #30 on: March 06, 2017, 11:38:52 AM »
And people wonder why we've got ties in the voting, for very different stories ;D
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #31 on: March 06, 2017, 03:19:51 PM »
i'm probably on the a-train.

"fear of loneliness; death's rank breath brushing down"
or
"fear of loneliness, the rank breath of death breezing down"

i'm personally not a fan of semicolons.  also, i like the possessive "death's rank breath" better.  oh, and i don't like either verb.  how about "dancing"?  or "playing"?  something that hits closer to the wonder of it.


"to feel alive"
or
"to be alive"

feel.  definitely feel.

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #32 on: March 09, 2017, 04:44:26 AM »
fickle b*****s

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #33 on: March 09, 2017, 09:57:55 AM »
I vote for an option C  ::)
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #34 on: March 09, 2017, 02:02:27 PM »
I vote for an option C  ::)

Ok option C it is : not include any of those and write a different character!

On to it!

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #35 on: March 10, 2017, 09:55:18 AM »
My first draft:

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Lo!  The hulking creature fell upon him in haste, with its wicked claws and gnashing maw-- the horror!  His hands flew up defensively, gasping breathlessly as he batted away each fell strike, the embattled pair locked in a deadly embrace.

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See Spot run! Spot is big!  See spot jump!  See Spot jump on John!
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #36 on: March 12, 2017, 12:29:34 PM »
Third idea. Finally, one I think I can sink my fingers into.

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #37 on: March 12, 2017, 01:00:16 PM »
I'm having a hard time with this one. Not the faintest hint of an idea. Sure, I may serve my meals pretty late, but I do have at least a few ideas cooking.

Anyway, considering what I've read and watched, the monster remains inhuman and incomprehensible mostly by remaining shrouded in mystery exactly because we don't have their POV showing us emotions/motivations that could make us understand what makes them tick.

It's like instead of writing a story from a random professor, I'm trying to put Cthulhu's thoughts and perspectives on the page, when it's exactly by not doing it that makes him/her/it so alien...
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #38 on: March 12, 2017, 01:04:13 PM »
@xiagan, we haven't had much luck in choosing the themes of the past few months, have we? :-\
Whatever we think is different and interesting, then people don't like... unless it was dragons, hehe

What is the writers' opinion? Do you want to be challenged?
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #39 on: March 12, 2017, 01:15:25 PM »
I didn't say I didn't like it, I just really have no clue how to write it properly...

I like the different challenges, maybe even one of them will make one of us create an entirely new genre in the future!

But this one I don't even know of examples to give me a foothold... My best attempt got me retelling of tales from different perspectives (and they still had very human feelings and motivations).
So maybe I could try to retell a story, like from the Medusa POV or like Alien from the Alien's viewpoint...but then it would be another fanfic...

EDIT: Actually I don't know if even that would work. Medusa could just be a woman gone mad and angry for being turned into a monster and then we would understand why she's like that. And Alien I heard was about motherhood, with the alien trying to protect her nest or something... so now you understand where the alien comes from and why she's doing all that...
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #40 on: March 12, 2017, 01:30:44 PM »
There are challenges we can enjoy and others we don't. In my case fanfic is a challenge, but one I'm utterly uninterested in taking. Others are challenges like this month but not bad at all. I see how it would be straining but I don't struggle to come up with ideas for characters. It's more the plot that stumps me so far.
We've written fairy tales from a different pov, where a few of us have sided with the baddies. And in dragons the pov was often the one of the creatures. That's exactly what this topic is about.
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #41 on: March 12, 2017, 01:43:29 PM »
Are likes not working here? Can't click it...

EDIT: Ok, this is strange. I can like the posts, but when I try to like an Anonymous post (the one in page 2), it doesn't work and also locks me of liking other posts if I don't refresh the page  :o
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #42 on: March 12, 2017, 01:59:04 PM »
@xiagan, we haven't had much luck in choosing the themes of the past few months, have we? :-\
Whatever we think is different and interesting, then people don't like... unless it was dragons, hehe

What is the writers' opinion? Do you want to be challenged?

I think Xia does a wonderful job with the themes,  carry on the good work.
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #43 on: March 12, 2017, 02:01:52 PM »
Are likes not working here? Can't click it...

EDIT: Ok, this is strange. I can like the posts, but when I try to like an Anonymous post (the one in page 2), it doesn't work and also locks me of liking other posts if I don't refresh the page  :o

You not trying to like your own anonymous post are you? Crafty devil!
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #44 on: March 12, 2017, 02:04:32 PM »
Are likes not working here? Can't click it...

EDIT: Ok, this is strange. I can like the posts, but when I try to like an Anonymous post (the one in page 2), it doesn't work and also locks me of liking other posts if I don't refresh the page  :o

You not trying to like your own anonymous post are you? Crafty devil!

That sounds like something you would do!
« Last Edit: March 12, 2017, 02:11:25 PM by Lanko »
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