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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #90 on: March 31, 2017, 12:14:56 PM »
Thing is, you're not slow - just late ;D
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #91 on: March 31, 2017, 12:21:28 PM »
Slow and steady wins the race.

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #92 on: March 31, 2017, 05:08:47 PM »
May I suggest this new profile picture?

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #93 on: March 31, 2017, 06:32:20 PM »
May I suggest this new profile picture?



I prefer a proper knight on top of the turtle, but I'm open to suggestions  ::)
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #94 on: April 01, 2017, 05:31:53 PM »


Turtle knight imo.

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #95 on: April 01, 2017, 09:48:40 PM »
Looks like this month it'll be anon but with a choice of Nora/Lanko in ownership of the two late stories.  ;D
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #96 on: April 01, 2017, 09:51:21 PM »
I was thinking that ;D
You two can still finish tonight, I can close tomorrow...
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #97 on: April 02, 2017, 07:36:30 AM »
Plot twist: What if I actually posted my story early and all references of me being late are just planned gamemanship for the Anonymous month? Think of that!  ;)
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #98 on: April 02, 2017, 10:15:55 AM »
Plot twist: What if I actually posted my story early and all references of me being late are just planned gamemanship for the Anonymous month? Think of that!  ;)
Oooooh, tricky!

Although... does anyone ACTUALLY believe that? ;D
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #99 on: April 02, 2017, 10:20:34 AM »
Plot twist: What if I actually posted my story early and all references of me being late are just planned gamemanship for the Anonymous month? Think of that!  ;)
Oooooh, tricky!

Although... does anyone ACTUALLY believe that? ;D

We'll find out on May, 1st!
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #100 on: April 02, 2017, 12:18:21 PM »
Plot twist: What if I actually posted my story early and all references of me being late are just planned gamemanship for the Anonymous month? Think of that!  ;)
Oooooh, tricky!

Although... does anyone ACTUALLY believe that? ;D

We'll find out on May, 1st!

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #101 on: April 02, 2017, 03:16:52 PM »
That hurt, @Jmack.

My punctuality being compared to Trump!

Just for more gamemanship, in Anonymous Corpses I insinuated I was in and got three stories attributed to me... and in the end I didn't submit anything  ::)

And I did had some difficulties with the theme, reading some pages back  ::)

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #102 on: April 05, 2017, 10:39:19 PM »
Aaaaand I just got an idea for this months contest... oops.

Haha, in that sense I'm even slower than you @Lanko :)

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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #103 on: April 06, 2017, 12:35:12 AM »
Aaaaand I just got an idea for this months contest... oops.

Haha, in that sense I'm even slower than you @Lanko :)

Nah, at least you did have an idea!
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Re: [Mar 2017] - Through the Beast's Eye - Discussion Thread
« Reply #104 on: April 06, 2017, 01:43:41 AM »
I'll probably never write it b/c life-stuff to do, and there's a long que of ideas in my head not yet finished on paper, but here's what I was thinking:

INTRO: Open with a man with bloody hands and a torn apart home-- he's just beaten his wife-- he's gripping his terrified son, three-or-four years old with a mysterious tattoo of some sort on the back of his neck-- allusion to magic afoot.  Make a reference to the hag next door.

flashback to the guy overwhelmingly falling in love with his wife-to-be-- they're drinking something (she cooked him soup? sharing wine?).  Maybe she's consoling him about the loss of his mother, idk but he goes from not loving her to being overwhelmed with the ecstasy of love.

BODY: Weave between the violence and danger of the current moment-- his wife is trying to leave him and he's threatening to kill her-- to past of running away together being in love, her consoling him about his abandonment issues with his own mother, him using love as a weapon to drive her from her family and friends, to abuse and control her-- he can't tell the difference between love and abuse, he can't see the parallels between his anger at his abused mother leaving him and the same abuse he's inflicting on his wife.

REVEAL 1: At some point in the back and forth above it's revealed the drink they shared in the first flashback (soup? alcohol?) was a love potion concocted by the hag next door.

END SCENE: She's bloody and beaten, the place is torn to pieces, but she's about to make it out the door.  Clutching the child in one hand and his weapon in another (a bat? a staff? a knife? I hadn't decided the time period yet), he threatens to kill their son.

She gets strangely calm and agrees to stay if he releases the kid to her. He releases the kid.  Holding the child she reveals that he never could have hurt the child, she had asked the hag to enchant the child so that any harm that befell the child would also befall his father (the tattoo).  He's relieved that she's not going.  He can't leave her-- but now he wants to hurt her again.  To punish her for hurting him and to prove to himself he doesn't need her by hurting her (even though he obviously needs her-- its the psychic dissonance of hating himself for needing her that drives him to violence).

He hefts the (bat?), an evil gleam in his eyes.  He plans to kill her. "You should have put the mark on yourself."

She looks at him flatly.  "Then you'd never know how much I hate you."

She snaps her son's arm, and the man's bones break, his bat falling to the floor and his arm falling uselessly to the side.

He looks at his wife in horror.

She snaps her sons neck.

The end!!!!!

In retrospect, that might be a little overly dark for this crowd....