May 28, 2017, 12:04:06 AM

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Please vote

The Reapers - D_Bates
1 (2%)
A Gift for the Nightmare Man - tebakutis
10 (20%)
Dreamt a Little Too Deep - Rukaio_Alter
4 (8%)
The Dreamcaster - Nora
2 (4%)
Dream Leaks - Henry Dale
1 (2%)
Sleep Study - Blackthorn
4 (8%)
FrightBits - m3mnoch
3 (6%)
Santa's Roller Coaster - SugoiMe
4 (8%)
Mr. Schlumon - night_wrtr
1 (2%)
Mare Ridden - Patchwork Mind
8 (16%)
Keep Turning - Hedin
6 (12%)
Broken - ArcaneArtsVelho
1 (2%)
Oneiromancer - Jmack
3 (6%)
The Dreamweaver - Lanko
2 (4%)

Total Members Voted: 19

Voting closed: May 01, 2016, 05:37:41 PM

Author Topic: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread  (Read 4812 times)

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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #75 on: May 01, 2016, 09:16:44 PM »
Congrats tebakutis!   Thanks to everyone who voted for mine, did not expect to get that much support.

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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #76 on: May 01, 2016, 11:05:34 PM »
Congrats tebakutis liked your story from the start, glad I picked a winner. Was drawn in and fascinated by whole situation and the unexpected but perfect ending.

 Surprisingly for me  also picked the other two top stories. Patchwork, congrats, hope you'll become a regular here and reason I voted for you is because you really truly scared me, what a nightmare.

Hedin, happy for you even though it was a 'Noooooo, how could you?' ending. Great story.

Thanks again to all writers, such entertaining reading again.
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #77 on: May 02, 2016, 02:23:52 AM »
Not sure if we're going to do a critique thread anymore (if so feel free to move this), but could use some opinions on my story as there were two things I struggled with.   The first is that I didn't know what to do with the start.   When I first started to write the story I didn't have an open so I just started writing at the middle and thought I would figure it out from there.  After I wrote everything middle started to seem more like an open.   I knew I didn't want to show whatever occurred to send my character to the ER and that I wanted to keep it dreamlike where you just jump into the dream/story.   I toyed with showing the character being moved from the ambulance to the ER but nothing I came up seemed like it did anything for the story other than add some word count padding.

Secondily, I'm not really sure I captured when the character was dying very well.   The story is based on a nightmare I had years ago and I recall the slowing down and difficulty of thought but couldn't really figure out how to convey that in words or format.   Any suggestions on how I could have made that clearer would be very welcomed.

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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #78 on: May 02, 2016, 04:11:17 AM »
Congrats Tebakutis! I voted for you and Hedin and Rukaio this month!
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #79 on: May 02, 2016, 05:12:21 AM »
Congrats on your completely deserved third win, teb. Excellent story. Looks like me and Jmack may have to watch our backs in the battle for GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST!TM
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #80 on: May 02, 2016, 08:35:32 AM »
Congrats on your completely deserved third win, teb. Excellent story. Looks like me and Jmack may have to watch our backs in the battle for GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST!TM
There is enough room for a GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITHING CONTEST, a GOAT EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST and a GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST. Don't you worry.  ;D
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #81 on: May 02, 2016, 08:44:19 AM »
Congrats on your completely deserved third win, teb. Excellent story. Looks like me and Jmack may have to watch our backs in the battle for GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST!TM
There is enough room for a GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITHING CONTEST, a GOAT EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST and a GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST. Don't you worry.  ;D

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I imagine arguments being swallowed back, wine spit in glasses and gurgling up bottles. I imagine my ring sliding off my finger, Bobby's lips hot on mine for the first time again, and then unknown to me.
Time doesn't seem to ever be kind. - Nora - Time's Arrow 1750

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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #82 on: May 02, 2016, 09:03:11 AM »
Congrats on your completely deserved third win, teb. Excellent story. Looks like me and Jmack may have to watch our backs in the battle for GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST!TM
There is enough room for a GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITHING CONTEST, a GOAT EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST and a GOD EMPEROR OF THE WRITING CONTEST. Don't you worry.  ;D

Hey @Nora, @SugoiMe time for a SUPREME GODDESS IMPERATRIX MUNDI to Rule them All and Bind them, Go ladiesl

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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #83 on: May 02, 2016, 09:26:47 AM »
I'm not really focusing that far... I'm still to earn a second monthly victory. I'll be proud enough when I catch up to three.
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #84 on: May 02, 2016, 03:38:51 PM »
I was happy enough to get votes. Still got a long way to go to catch up to those guys.
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[Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #85 on: May 02, 2016, 09:03:16 PM »
We did have girls/women with multiple wins in the past! If I'm not mistaken LadyGreen had three or four.
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #86 on: May 02, 2016, 09:43:03 PM »
Ladygreen, I still remember the winning story of the year she had.
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #87 on: May 02, 2016, 09:55:20 PM »
i'm pretty sure this is where i'm supposed to show up and say "boys rule, girls drool!", right?

right?!

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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #88 on: May 02, 2016, 10:03:31 PM »
i'm pretty sure this is where i'm supposed to show up and say "boys rule, girls take over the world!", right?

right?!
Fixed that for you 8)
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Re: [Mar 2016] - Nightmares - Voting Thread
« Reply #89 on: May 03, 2016, 01:10:58 AM »
i'm pretty sure this is where i'm supposed to show up and say "boys rule, girls take over the world!", right?

right?!
Fixed that for you 8)

I would quip otherwise but my wife might find out.

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