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[June 2014] - Taboos! - Critique Thread
« on: August 11, 2014, 08:34:38 PM »
Second critique thread for writing contest stories. :)
Sorry for opening it so late but I had a seven-day/70hrs-week... :P Will hopefully get better now...

So here is the possibility to get critiques for your stories entered in our Taboo writing contest - and to give critique as well.

If everybody wants and gives critique, this thread will be pure chaos soon, while 2-3 critiques for as many stories shouldn't be a problem. We'll see how it goes and adapt if necessary. :)

So what we're doing is this:
1. Everybody who wants critique for his story posts in here.*
2. Everybody who wants to do a critique for a specific story (whose writer has asked for critique) posts it in here.

IF this thread is overrun fast, I'm splitting it so that every story has it's own one to avoid confusion. :)

* I know that critique isn't always easy to handle, especially if you are not used to it. So if you feel more comfortable receiving it in private, people can send it via pm. They can post here that they sent a critique via pm so that others know about it.

At the moment I don't think it necessary that we create a system balancing given/received critiques. However, if it turns out to be unfair and some people are giving critiques without receiving some (or the other way round) we have to add one.

Basic rules for critiquing:

This is just a small guideline for those that haven't done critiques before, stolen from this forum's writing section.
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Critiquing Other’s Work
1. Please read what the poster is asking for before you post your critique.
2. Critique the writing, not the writer.  Never, “You are...” or “You should...” but rather, “The writing is...” or “The story should...”
3. We all have different levels of writing ability here, keep that in mind when critiquing.
4. Find what is right in each piece as well as what is wrong.
5. Remember that subject matter is personal. You don't have to like a story to give it a fair critique.
6. Remember what your biases are and critique around them.
7. Remember that real people wrote this stuff, and real people have real feelings. Things you may not say while critiquing: “That’s awful.”  “That’s stupid.” “You couldn’t write your way out of a paper bag.”
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Re: [June 2014] - Taboos! - Critique Thread
« Reply #1 on: August 12, 2014, 11:51:02 PM »
I'd be interested in giving and receiving feedback again this month.  I'm working on something longer that plays about with time and plot in a similar way at the moment to my entry so how I handle this would be a good place to start if anyone feels like taking a look over it.  There are a few things I was not overly happy with even after multiple read-throughs as well so any other comments will be very welcome.

Thanks.

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Re: [June 2014] - Taboos! - Critique Thread
« Reply #2 on: August 13, 2014, 06:25:07 PM »
Carter, I really liked your story.
As a reader, it kept me wanting more
I thought that the fact of jumping back and forth between scenes and times was quite good, it was one of the elements that captured my attention, made me think, understand more as the story progressed. However, I'm not sure that would work in a longer piece, at least not if the "sections" are as short as in this story, it would feel too 'jumpy'.

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Re: [June 2014] - Taboos! - Critique Thread
« Reply #3 on: August 14, 2014, 06:48:40 PM »
Thanks ScarletBea.  I'm glad it worked in this story and I'm going to make some changes to the other one based both on my experiences writing this and what you've said.  It's something I know was/will be crucial to it working.  I know you didn't have a story in this competition but if you ever want me to return the favour let me know.
Thanks again.

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Re: [June 2014] - Taboos! - Critique Thread
« Reply #4 on: August 14, 2014, 08:41:15 PM »
You're welcome, but I'm not a writer - "just" a reader, hehe
And I like reading the competition stories :)
« Last Edit: August 14, 2014, 08:53:36 PM by ScarletBea »
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