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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #105 on: January 15, 2016, 04:47:25 PM »
@m3mnoch

I have a similar hangover. I have an email signature, which is my name (God forbid I tell any of you that though) in lowercase preceded by an obviously erroneous full stop. Let's say my name is bob for instance.
you know it's from me when it ends like this,
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And .you won't tell us .your .name because... We'd tease .you mercilessly?  We'd toilet paper .your house? We'd charge porn to .your credit card? (Actually, that would only be @Nighteyes)

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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #106 on: January 16, 2016, 12:13:47 AM »
For those familiar with my new foible about having a character's name in the opening line of a short story, you'll be pleased to know Joe Abercrombie doesn't agree with me - he just tweeted this pic of him editing page proofs from his forthcoming short story collection.

https://twitter.com/LordGrimdark/status/688020416707870721

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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #107 on: January 17, 2016, 07:55:08 AM »
Just posted mine. This was pretty funny. Was actually pretty quick too, I thought it was easier than Young Love  :o
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #108 on: January 17, 2016, 03:34:54 PM »
Just posted mine. This was pretty funny. Was actually pretty quick too, I thought it was easier than Young Love  :o

agreed.  WAAAAAY easier than young love.

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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #109 on: January 17, 2016, 03:35:58 PM »
Just posted mine. This was pretty funny. Was actually pretty quick too, I thought it was easier than Young Love  :o

agreed.  WAAAAAY easier than young love.

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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #110 on: January 17, 2016, 04:36:39 PM »
See???
I'll never say what's easy and what's not ever again ::)
I thought Young Love would be easy and this one hard, everybody saying the opposite ;D
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #111 on: January 17, 2016, 10:18:48 PM »
See???
I'll never say what's easy and what's not ever again ::)
I thought Young Love would be easy and this one hard, everybody saying the opposite ;D

I think it's because none of us are romance writers, look at how we bitch about love in SFF stories in the writer section.
But now this... It only requires some humor.  ::)
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #112 on: January 17, 2016, 10:23:42 PM »
I guess I never thought that 'breaking the 4th wall' would be achieved by humour... I was imagining it more like a Matrix-type of story, very convoluted and intermingling worlds...
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #113 on: January 17, 2016, 10:52:58 PM »
Well that's what I'm going back to.

I'm abandoning the story I had planned on reading. It was a lighter version of a longer short story I want to write, and I actually don't want to publish it here or make it so funny as to have it break the fourth wall.
It was great to expend on it, but now I'm back work on my more serious "Matrix type" work, just like you though it'd imply.
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #114 on: January 17, 2016, 11:05:24 PM »
I guess I never thought that 'breaking the 4th wall' would be achieved by humour... I was imagining it more like a Matrix-type of story, very convoluted and intermingling worlds...
Heh. I guess you missed my April Plot Twist entry. I get the feeling that might have been one of the main reasons for all the comedic stories we've had so far.

If it's any consolation though, I'm having more trouble with this one than I did with Young Love. Mainly because it's difficult to come up with a premise that's interesting enough to win without feeling derivative of said April story. Plus getting the balance right is difficult with 4th wall humour. Go too far and it can easily become obnoxious. I've had a number of ideas that were funny in theory but didn't really work when written up.

Still, I think I've got a solid idea working at the moment. Especially since I'm apparently going to need to pull out all the stops to beat Jmack's entry.
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #115 on: January 17, 2016, 11:15:45 PM »
Damn, am I really goign to be the only one with a boring as serious story? ::)
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #116 on: January 17, 2016, 11:20:14 PM »
I guess I never thought that 'breaking the 4th wall' would be achieved by humour... I was imagining it more like a Matrix-type of story, very convoluted and intermingling worlds...
Heh. I guess you missed my April Plot Twist entry. I get the feeling that might have been one of the main reasons for all the comedic stories we've had so far.

If it's any consolation though, I'm having more trouble with this one than I did with Young Love. Mainly because it's difficult to come up with a premise that's interesting enough to win without feeling derivative of said April story. Plus getting the balance right is difficult with 4th wall humour. Go too far and it can easily become obnoxious. I've had a number of ideas that were funny in theory but didn't really work when written up.

Still, I think I've got a solid idea working at the moment. Especially since I'm apparently going to need to pull out all the stops to beat Jmack's entry.



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Damn, am I really goign to be the only one with a boring as serious story? ::)
The idea we have is a serious one. Not sure if we'll write it though.  :-\
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #117 on: January 17, 2016, 11:30:11 PM »
Damn, am I really goign to be the only one with a boring as serious story? ::)
The idea we have is a serious one. Not sure if we'll write it though.  :-\

Please, please, please, do it, I need you guys!!
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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #118 on: January 17, 2016, 11:34:02 PM »
Damn, am I really goign to be the only one with a boring as serious story? ::)
The idea we have is a serious one. Not sure if we'll write it though.  :-\

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Re: [Jan 2016] - Breaking the fourth wall - Discussion Thread
« Reply #119 on: January 17, 2016, 11:41:17 PM »
I guess I never thought that 'breaking the 4th wall' would be achieved by humour... I was imagining it more like a Matrix-type of story, very convoluted and intermingling worlds...
Heh. I guess you missed my April Plot Twist entry. I get the feeling that might have been one of the main reasons for all the comedic stories we've had so far.

If it's any consolation though, I'm having more trouble with this one than I did with Young Love. Mainly because it's difficult to come up with a premise that's interesting enough to win without feeling derivative of said April story. Plus getting the balance right is difficult with 4th wall humour. Go too far and it can easily become obnoxious. I've had a number of ideas that were funny in theory but didn't really work when written up.

Still, I think I've got a solid idea working at the moment. Especially since I'm apparently going to need to pull out all the stops to beat Jmack's entry.



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Damn, am I really goign to be the only one with a boring as serious story? ::)
There are some fairly serious stories already posted, so don't worry about that.
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