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Title: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 01, 2015, 04:15:07 PM
Young love

(http://orig08.deviantart.net/5945/f/2012/277/3/6/a_young_love_by_eley0n-d5gtd3w.jpg)
A young love by IreneMartini (http://irenemartini.deviantart.com/)

This month I want you to write about people experiencing true love (or what they believe to be love at that moment) for the first time.
I had another theme already set up, but Bea found it too hard for December. ;)
I know that writing about feelings - and especially love - is quite hard too and since love is an integral part of human* life, it's about time you try your hand at writing about it. :)

If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.
It's about the experience of love, not teenagers, not romance and not necessarily girls. People can be old(er), the feeling doesn't have to be mutual, the ending not happy and the main character(s) not female. Love comes in all sizes and flavours and it's up to you to write an intriguing short story about it. I don't care for the same old clichés and gender roles. Find your story and make it believable.

If your story needs sex or explicit content, that's okay. Just give us a warning in your submission post.

*human? We're writing fantasy! No need for speciesism. If that Elf loves an Orc, who are we to judge?



Rules:

1. This must be prose or poetry.
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.
3. Prose must be 500-1500 words long.
4. Poetry must be 100-500 words long.
5. One story per person or writing team (not per account).
6. You will be disqualified if you exceed the limits, full stop. That's why they're called limits.
7. Your entry can't be published somewhere else before.
8. This is a writing contest, not a "I have written something like this ten years ago" contest. So if you happen to have a story that fits one of the themes, I'd like it to have a mayor overhaul/edit. Work for it. ;)
9. Please add your story's word count and, if you have, your twitter handle.
10. Please put your story in [ spoiler ] tags to make the thread easier to handle. :) You can find them above the smileys next to the 'youtube' symbol.

Entry will close December 31th, 2015/January 1st, 2016 and voting will begin somewhere around the same time too.

All members are eligible to join. If you are not a member you can join here (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/register/). Sign up is free and all are welcome! :)

The winner will have their piece displayed on the main Fantasy Faction website sometime in the next months.

Please post your entry here (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/%28dec-2015%29-young-love/%28dec-2015%29-young-love-submission-thread/new/#new).

Note: This thread is only for questions or discussing this month's writing contest. Good luck!

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 01, 2015, 04:19:56 PM
YES!!  my specialty!

*blink*  *blink*

um...  right.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Rukaio_Alter on December 01, 2015, 04:28:15 PM
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.
2. Must contain a big, mythical (as in doesn't exist as far as we know and not as in has to be from a mythology) creature.
Me thinks you accidentally left in a small holdover from the last competition in the instructions.

Not that I'm opposed to writing a romance between a boy and a dragon, mind. (And chances are, now I've said that, at least one other person is going to try doing so as well.)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 01, 2015, 04:30:15 PM
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.
2. Must contain a big, mythical (as in doesn't exist as far as we know and not as in has to be from a mythology) creature.
Me thinks you accidentally left in a small holdover from the last competition in the instructions.

Not that I'm opposed to writing a romance between a boy and a dragon, mind. (And chances are, now I've said that, at least one other person is going to try doing so as well.)
The big, mythical beast is love. It's an allegory. 8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 01, 2015, 04:46:45 PM
So it's called Young Love but the characters can also be older but the rules states it has to be about first love.
Is it young love or first love? They are very different things

Also can't wait to write that Orc, Elf, Goblin gay menage-a-trois to see how many votes I get. :D


Title: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 01, 2015, 04:53:18 PM
It's sad but not uncommon to not find somebody you love until you are old(er). Especially if it's a culture with arranged marriages. The love should be young and maybe a first, the characters don't have to be.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 01, 2015, 04:54:02 PM
It's sad but not uncommon to not find somebody you love until you are old(er). Especially if it's a culture with arranged marriages. The love should be young and maybe a first, the characters don't have to be.
That's what I presumed, just the title of it suggests otherwise is all. :)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 01, 2015, 10:47:45 PM
Hmmm... Good topic, lots of possibilities but... Does it really have to be a first love?
Does that really disqualify all the stories featuring older people who thought themselves in love once, and have come out of their first relationships a bit bitter, making for a more amazing experience when love knocks on the door once more?
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 01, 2015, 10:53:53 PM
I'll leave that to @xiagan (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=1148) to decide, but I think he means 'young' as in 'fresh', not necessarily 'first' love. So that includes your option (however 'fantasy' it seems hehe)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 01, 2015, 11:13:33 PM
Rule says :

Quote
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.

So it's either their first love ever, personally, or their first time loving each other. In this case, it's "falling in love" not an old long lasting love (and I get why that wouldn't be included).
Just want to know which it is.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ultamentkiller on December 01, 2015, 11:14:45 PM
Also can't wait to write that Orc, Elf, Goblin gay menage-a-trois to see how many votes I get. :D
This. If someone pulls that off, it would most likely get my vote just because of how crazy that is! 
Just to clarify, I've never seen that done before, which is why I say crazy.
I'm kind of nervous about this. I've never done a creative writing contest before. I've been apart of a creative writing club for a while, but never a contest.
Here I go.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 02, 2015, 12:18:25 AM
Rule says :

Quote
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.

So it's either their first love ever, personally, or their first time loving each other. In this case, it's "falling in love" not an old long lasting love (and I get why that wouldn't be included).
Just want to know which it is.
That's what I asked above just better phrased ^^^^

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 02, 2015, 12:36:27 AM
Rule says :

Quote
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.

So it's either their first love ever, personally, or their first time loving each other. In this case, it's "falling in love" not an old long lasting love (and I get why that wouldn't be included).
Just want to know which it is.
That's what I asked above just better phrased ^^^^

Oh. Glad you guys helped get this clear.
I keep thinking about old loves rekindled.
Yeah, not the same as young love. Duh.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 02, 2015, 12:41:55 AM
Rule says :

Quote
2. Must be the story (or part of) people experiencing their first love.

So it's either their first love ever, personally, or their first time loving each other. In this case, it's "falling in love" not an old long lasting love (and I get why that wouldn't be included).
Just want to know which it is.
That's what I asked above just better phrased ^^^^

Oh. Glad you guys helped get this clear.
I keep thinking about old loves rekindled.
Yeah, not the same as young love. Duh.

what about the first time they try pistachio ice cream?  does that count?
Title: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 02, 2015, 05:40:50 AM
I'm sure there's an universe where you can marry pistachio ice cream. ;)

I found 'love' to broad a theme, so I wanted to narrow it down a bit.

(I may have come up with the title some time ago and then wrote the description recently in a hurry, which may have changed a bit from what I originally thought.)
So yeah, young and/or first in all possible definitions is okay by me.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 02, 2015, 11:03:37 AM
[mumbles] Is it going to work?
(http://i279.photobucket.com/albums/kk145/cellaneous/Kolobok/JC-thinking.gif)
Yes, this will do just fine for an idea I have had in my head for months.
Now, if only I knew how to write it...
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 02, 2015, 12:32:29 PM
[mumbles] Is it going to work?
(http://i279.photobucket.com/albums/kk145/cellaneous/Kolobok/JC-thinking.gif)
Yes, this will do just fine for an idea I have had in my head for months.
Now, if only I knew how to write it...

You can try with a word processor. If you're easier without too much technology, you can start by using a pen and some paper.
Apply yourself until you reach the word limit, edit, submit.

 ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 02, 2015, 01:13:35 PM
[mumbles] Is it going to work?
(http://i279.photobucket.com/albums/kk145/cellaneous/Kolobok/JC-thinking.gif)
Yes, this will do just fine for an idea I have had in my head for months.
Now, if only I knew how to write it...

You can try with a word processor. If you're easier without too much technology, you can start by using a pen and some paper.
Apply yourself until you reach the word limit, edit, submit.

 ;D
;D
I set that up pretty well, didn't I?  ;) 8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 02, 2015, 02:32:20 PM
Now just trying to figure out how to make a gay threesome between Orcs and an Elf work...nothing solid has really hit me with inspiration yet.

I am intrigued by what people come up with in this month though, lets also have some variety eh? ;) Think there's plenty of straight love stories between humans out there as it is.



Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 02, 2015, 02:36:32 PM
Now just trying to figure out how to make a gay threesome between Orcs and an Elf work...nothing solid has really hit me with inspiration yet.

I am intrigued by what people come up with in this month though, lets also have some variety eh? ;) Think there's plenty of straight love stories between humans out there as it is.

Tolkien said orcs were corrupted elves right?
So they should be able to get together somehow... ???
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 02, 2015, 02:38:33 PM
I'll be ignoring the Tolkien versions of Orcs and Elves. :D

Oh and it's less the actual mechanics of how the intercourse would work and more the scenario, don't want it to end up like a lemon stealing porn situation...

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 02, 2015, 02:59:35 PM
(https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/c1/bd/76/c1bd76ecab6a085aa46eb91a5120c3d4.jpg)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 02, 2015, 03:56:12 PM
(https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/736x/c1/bd/76/c1bd76ecab6a085aa46eb91a5120c3d4.jpg)

With you I have to ask: did you do that? Or find it?

It's awesome.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 02, 2015, 04:33:49 PM
found it.  i _wish_ i'd thought to draw it.

totally agree that it's awesome.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: tebakutis on December 02, 2015, 06:44:34 PM
The first thing that comes to mind when I see that picture is a Night Elf and an Orc from World of Warcraft. Probably because WoW is the first game that comes to mind with purple elves and green orcs. Is there context for it?
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 02, 2015, 09:58:49 PM
The first thing that comes to mind when I see that picture is a Night Elf and an Orc from World of Warcraft. Probably because WoW is the first game that comes to mind with purple elves and green orcs. Is there context for it?

i believe that's precisely the lore/races/ip involved.

the context would be all the funny elf-on-orc love in the previous posts.  tho, considering, maybe it deserves a remix where both hands are male.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 02, 2015, 10:49:14 PM
The first thing that comes to mind when I see that picture is a Night Elf and an Orc from World of Warcraft. Probably because WoW is the first game that comes to mind with purple elves and green orcs. Is there context for it?

i believe that's precisely the lore/races/ip involved.

the context would be all the funny elf-on-orc love in the previous posts.  tho, considering, maybe it deserves a remix where both hands are male.
That's the idea anyway :D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 03, 2015, 11:13:53 AM
I'm done. Will post once I finish formatting for the forum.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 03, 2015, 11:24:11 AM
This topic is giving me hearburn. Or is that love? Hmm.


I'm done. Will post once I finish formatting for the forum.

Already!?!?  :o
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 03, 2015, 11:31:07 AM
I'm done. Will post once I finish formatting for the forum.

Already!?!?  :o
If you look at previous months, Henry is usually the first, the same way that AAV is usually the last ;D

Good to see us going back to normal 8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 11:39:48 AM
This topic is giving me hearburn. Or is that love? Hmm.
Same. I'd love to hear what theme it was that @ScarletBea (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=32020) thought was too difficult - I can't think of anything that is more difficult than creating an interesting, short love story... (http://liberalforum.net/images/smilies/blink.gif)

I'm done. Will post once I finish formatting for the forum.

Already!?!?  :o
He has a pact with the devil. Hence the unsummonableness. (http://forum.yowindow.com/images/smilies/kolobok_wink.gif)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 03, 2015, 11:43:39 AM
I'm done. Will post once I finish formatting for the forum.

Already!?!?  :o
If you look at previous months, Henry is usually the first, the same way that AAV is usually the last ;D

Good to see us going back to normal 8)
Totally  8)

Now back to writing groups + last month's voting...
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 03, 2015, 12:05:20 PM
Read it.
@Henry (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=8080) Dale is definitely in league with the devil.  :o ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 03, 2015, 12:11:45 PM
Read it.
@Henry (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=8080) Dale is definitely in league with the devil.  :o ;)

Nope.
Devil: Summonable
Henry Dale: Unsummonable
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 03, 2015, 12:31:59 PM
Read it.
@Henry (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=8080) Dale is definitely in league with the devil.  :o ;)

Nope.
Devil: Summonable
Henry Dale: Unsummonable

LIKE button. Dammit. [pushes touch screen disgustedly]
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 03, 2015, 12:33:48 PM
lots of likes ;D

This topic is giving me hearburn. Or is that love? Hmm.
Same. I'd love to hear what theme it was that @ScarletBea (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=32020) thought was too difficult - I can't think of anything that is more difficult than creating an interesting, short love story... (http://liberalforum.net/images/smilies/blink.gif)
I think I asked @xiagan (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=1148) to use that in January, so you might see it then ;)
(then again, it might be difficult for me but a breeze for you hehe)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 03, 2015, 12:39:36 PM
Gotta agree with Raptori, such a short space is going to make it tough to expand love stories.

I think I'm going to go for some weird things... Relations between servant and master, and/or not knowing the sex of any of the party involved... Not going to get any ground breaking work, but my only experience in anything close to romance was a 4 hands exquisite cadaver short story that was a gritty sex scene...
I feel unprepared.  ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 12:50:28 PM
This topic is giving me hearburn. Or is that love? Hmm.
Same. I'd love to hear what theme it was that @ScarletBea (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=32020) thought was too difficult - I can't think of anything that is more difficult than creating an interesting, short love story... (http://liberalforum.net/images/smilies/blink.gif)
I think I asked @xiagan (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=1148) to use that in January, so you might see it then ;)
(then again, it might be difficult for me but a breeze for you hehe)
Cool.  :P

Yeah, depends on the person I guess.  :)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 03, 2015, 12:55:50 PM
I actually already have my idea, a good grip of my characters and a dire situation. I like it.  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 03, 2015, 12:56:26 PM
You can't tell a love story well in short format. A single scene, an event, a special moment, ... that's all it takes.
I know writing about love is hard but don't make it harder as it is by trying to do the impossible. ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 01:00:09 PM
You can't tell a love story well in short format. A single scene, an event, a special moment, ... that's all it takes.
I know writing about love is hard but don't make it harder as it is by trying to do the impossible. ;)
But... it's a short story contest! Isn't the whole point to write a story? :D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 03, 2015, 01:03:51 PM
A story that reflects people in love: they don't have to meet and fall in love during your story!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 03, 2015, 01:06:50 PM
I'm done. Will post once I finish formatting for the forum.

Already!?!?  :o
If you look at previous months, Henry is usually the first, the same way that AAV is usually the last ;D

Good to see us going back to normal 8)
Well actually, out of the 11 contest I have participated in, I have been last only 5 times.  8)
 ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 01:07:25 PM
A story that reflects people in love: they don't have to meet and fall in love during your story!
In understand each of those words, but put them together and I'm like: (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)

 :-[

Well actually, out of the 11 contest I have participated in, I have been last only 5 times.  8)
 ;D
Ahh, but how many times have you submitted your story in the last day or two?  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 03, 2015, 01:09:39 PM
A story that reflects people in love: they don't have to meet and fall in love during your story!
I understand each of those words, but put them together and I'm like: (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)

 :-[
hmmm
Think of Mistborn book 3: Vin and 'now-I-completely-forgot-name-of-husband-in-white-suit' are in love, working together. We see their love in action, so to say, but the whole story of how they met and got together happened in books 1 and 2.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 03, 2015, 01:12:01 PM
In understand each of those words, but put them together and I'm like: (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)

 :-[
You could write about how @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290) and you met and then change the names and add some peril and a fantastic element.  ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 01:13:12 PM
A story that reflects people in love: they don't have to meet and fall in love during your story!
I understand each of those words, but put them together and I'm like: (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)

 :-[
hmmm
Think of Mistborn book 3: Vin and 'now-I-completely-forgot-name-of-husband-in-white-suit' are in love, working together. We see their love in action, so to say, but the whole story of how they met and got together happened in books 1 and 2.
So you mean that the love can be pretty much completely irrelevant? (http://liberalforum.net/images/smilies/blink.gif)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 03, 2015, 01:14:36 PM
A story that reflects people in love: they don't have to meet and fall in love during your story!
I understand each of those words, but put them together and I'm like: (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)

 :-[
hmmm
Think of Mistborn book 3: Vin and 'now-I-completely-forgot-name-of-husband-in-white-suit' are in love, working together. We see their love in action, so to say, but the whole story of how they met and got together happened in books 1 and 2.

Which doesn't mean it's viable as a standalone love story – I'm saying this because I found that book horrible.  :D

@Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) : look, if you were writing about the moment of betrayal, in a love story, you could have a character raving about how that was his first love (or only possible love? Imagine species which can only mate with one partner, like some birds, mixed with a more free person who shatters their views and expectations?) you could definitely write about such events while the main "falling in love and being all over each other" is past, off stage and only refered to.
Likewise with a declaration going wild. A character on its way to propose could fill us in with the charming details and events that made it fall in love with the second character, ect.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 03, 2015, 01:15:54 PM
A story that reflects people in love: they don't have to meet and fall in love during your story!
I understand each of those words, but put them together and I'm like: (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)

 :-[
hmmm
Think of Mistborn book 3: Vin and 'now-I-completely-forgot-name-of-husband-in-white-suit' are in love, working together. We see their love in action, so to say, but the whole story of how they met and got together happened in books 1 and 2.
So you mean that the love can be pretty much completely irrelevant? (http://liberalforum.net/images/smilies/blink.gif)

Read my entry. Besides the need for brain bleach it's somehow about love...a bit distorted.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 01:20:44 PM
Which doesn't mean it's viable as a standalone love story – I'm saying this because I found that book horrible.  :D

@Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) : look, if you were writing about the moment of betrayal, in a love story, you could have a character raving about how that was his first love (or only possible love? Imagine species which can only mate with one partner, like some birds, mixed with a more free person who shatters their views and expectations?) you could definitely write about such events while the main "falling in love and being all over each other" is past, off stage and only refered to.
Likewise with a declaration going wild. A character on its way to propose could fill us in with the charming details and events that made it fall in love with the second character, ect.
Still a bit (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)! Guess it's just really not my theme.

Read my entry. Besides the need for brain bleach it's somehow about love...a bit distorted.
I try not to read any entries until we're done writing our own, always makes it more difficult to come up with ideas when I do that...  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 03, 2015, 01:23:06 PM
Well actually, out of the 11 contest I have participated in, I have been last only 5 times.  8)
 ;D
Ahh, but how many times have you submitted your story in the last day or two?  :P
I refrain from answering your question as it is not pertinent to the discussion.  ::)
 ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 03, 2015, 01:26:36 PM
Well actually, out of the 11 contest I have participated in, I have been last only 5 times.  8)
 ;D
Ahh, but how many times have you submitted your story in the last day or two?  :P
I refrain from answering your question as it is not pertinent to the discussion.  ::)
 ;D
(http://www.en.kolobok.us/smiles/standart/beee.gif)

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Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 03, 2015, 01:43:28 PM
Ideas for "scenes" that don't require an entire build up :



Ect. ect!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: tebakutis on December 03, 2015, 03:16:55 PM
This is going to be a tough one for me. Pretty much every novel I've written includes a romance subplot, but it's just that ... a subplot. I'm having absolutely no luck coming up with a story where love is the main focus, so I'll probably just end up doing what I always do.

Writing a short story with a love subplot. :)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 03, 2015, 03:33:21 PM
catching up on this thread since last night (like, 10 hours ago) has me all:

1) ha!  that's awesome!
2) looks for like button.
3) curses!  this is dumb!
4) moves on to the next post.
5) go back to #1
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 03, 2015, 06:32:39 PM
And I'm just sat here thinking about what an Orc's penis might look like.

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 03, 2015, 06:46:14 PM
And I'm just sat here thinking about what an Orc's penis might look like.

@m3mnoch (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40419): NO ART IN RESPONSE TO THIS POST!

just saying  :o

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 03, 2015, 07:56:08 PM
And I'm just sat here thinking about what an Orc's penis might look like.

@m3mnoch (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40419): NO ART IN RESPONSE TO THIS POST!

just saying  :o


alrighty.  you asked for it.

(http://www.christyfitzwater.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/08/trick.jpg)

made you look!

<punches you twice in the shoulder>

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 03, 2015, 08:34:11 PM
And I'm just sat here thinking about what an Orc's penis might look like.

@m3mnoch (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40419): NO ART IN RESPONSE TO THIS POST!

just saying  :o


alrighty.  you asked for it.

(http://www.christyfitzwater.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/08/trick.jpg)

made you look!

<punches you twice in the shoulder>


Ugh.

I'm not sure why I looked. It could have been a picture of anything. Probably not an orc's member, but still. The possibility was there and I clicked it anyway.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 03, 2015, 08:40:23 PM
Ugh.

I'm not sure why I looked. It could have been a picture of anything. Probably not an orc's member, but still. The possibility was there and I clicked it anyway.

one of the benefits of having my "omg -- i would totally believe he put that in there!" reputation.

you NEVER know what you're going to get!

it might even be "on topic".  ha!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 03, 2015, 10:23:49 PM

If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.

...You guys have no, NO idea how tempted I am to write about teenage girls who are in love, featuring vampires and werewolves, just for that statement. :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 03, 2015, 10:31:33 PM

If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.

...You guys have no, NO idea how tempted I am to write about teenage girls who are in love, featuring vampires and werewolves, just for that statement. :P
I say go for it, why not? Who says that wouldn't be a great story? Esp if you change it up, play with the tropes a bit perhaps. Could be really good.

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 03, 2015, 11:10:06 PM

If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.

...You guys have no, NO idea how tempted I am to write about teenage girls who are in love, featuring vampires and werewolves, just for that statement. :P
I say go for it, why not? Who says that wouldn't be a great story? Esp if you change it up, play with the tropes a bit perhaps. Could be really good.



I think I will, honestly. My first thought on seeing the prompt was another character in that 'verse, but on reflection, teenage girl vampire/werewolf I think. Once I can work out a scene or a plot.

Although, I am somewhat thinking if people are so off-put by the idea of writing teenage girls, that should be a monthly contest all of its own... ;-)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 04, 2015, 12:16:28 AM

If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.

...You guys have no, NO idea how tempted I am to write about teenage girls who are in love, featuring vampires and werewolves, just for that statement. :P
I say go for it, why not? Who says that wouldn't be a great story? Esp if you change it up, play with the tropes a bit perhaps. Could be really good.



I think I will, honestly. My first thought on seeing the prompt was another character in that 'verse, but on reflection, teenage girl vampire/werewolf I think. Once I can work out a scene or a plot.

Although, I am somewhat thinking if people are so off-put by the idea of writing teenage girls, that should be a monthly contest all of its own... ;-)

Been there, done that, don't need a reminder. I would totally skip a month of teenage girl.

No. Actually.
I'd write about a teenage girl slave. Maybe trapped in a alien space-harem. Off stage tentacle sex references. Just to show my discontent  >:(  ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ultamentkiller on December 04, 2015, 02:13:21 AM
I would have to skip that prompt. Being a teenager myself, I still haven't figured that one out, and probably never will. The laughter would force me to hide in the mountains.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 04, 2015, 02:58:53 AM
I just got a flash of an idea. Now I have to let it perc for a bit, see if it assembles itself a bit. 
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 04, 2015, 08:26:44 AM
I would have to skip that prompt. Being a teenager myself, I still haven't figured that one out, and probably never will. The laughter would force me to hide in the mountains.
awwww
Don't think you have to turn into a vampire or a werewolf to get a girl... 8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 04, 2015, 08:27:35 AM

If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.

...You guys have no, NO idea how tempted I am to write about teenage girls who are in love, featuring vampires and werewolves, just for that statement. :P
I say go for it, why not? Who says that wouldn't be a great story? Esp if you change it up, play with the tropes a bit perhaps. Could be really good.



I think I will, honestly. My first thought on seeing the prompt was another character in that 'verse, but on reflection, teenage girl vampire/werewolf I think. Once I can work out a scene or a plot.

Although, I am somewhat thinking if people are so off-put by the idea of writing teenage girls, that should be a monthly contest all of its own... ;-)
Please check the monthly writing contest from this year's April. ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 04, 2015, 09:57:58 AM
I would have to skip that prompt. Being a teenager myself, I still haven't figured that one out, and probably never will. The laughter would force me to hide in the mountains.

Aw, why skipping? Teenage girls have gotten up to all kinds of things (Joan of Arc springs to mind, Cleopatra was only 18 when she was made ruler of Egypt, and had to survive years of that deadly court beforehand) just like teenage boys.

Besiiiides, I have no ability to make prompts, so, you're all safe from having to do anything. Was just a slightly tongue-in-cheek suggestion.


If you now stare in disgust at your screen because you think that you have to write a teen girl romance, you're wrong.

...You guys have no, NO idea how tempted I am to write about teenage girls who are in love, featuring vampires and werewolves, just for that statement. :P
I say go for it, why not? Who says that wouldn't be a great story? Esp if you change it up, play with the tropes a bit perhaps. Could be really good.



I think I will, honestly. My first thought on seeing the prompt was another character in that 'verse, but on reflection, teenage girl vampire/werewolf I think. Once I can work out a scene or a plot.

Although, I am somewhat thinking if people are so off-put by the idea of writing teenage girls, that should be a monthly contest all of its own... ;-)
Please check the monthly writing contest from this year's April. ;)

See, I thought the original prompt was interesting :P Instead of taking the normal pot-shots at a popular genre, getting people to try and think up original twists on the premise.

And I never did mention anything about a love-triangle... Annoying things they are. Polyamory all the way.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 04, 2015, 01:33:35 PM
So here's what I love and hate.

Love: Every story prompt triggers an avalanche of possible story ideas in my head.
Hate and Love: Unfortunately, some of them are good (at least in my head), and I end up with yet another possible World to write about.

This time... (don't read if you want my story to be fresh after I post it)
Alexander is an orphan who lives in the Endless Library of Finer Learning. He spends most of his time with the squirrels who are forced to find, deliver and re-shelve books all day long; but he also knows the owls who are there to keep the mice and rats out and serve as enforcers on any squirrel who removes his magic ID tag.

Penelope is the daughter of a magician from Ophir. He brings her to the Library; and while he is doing his research, he sends her off to obtain the volumes he needs. One of these books is in the Un-indexed Section. Penny gets lost trying to find it, until Alex comes to her aid. Together, they venture into the wild and dangerous U-Section, coming out with the book. Penny gives Alex a sweetheart kiss; though he doesn't quite know what to make of it.

Penelope and her father leave to return to Ophir, and Alex already begins to miss her. The wise squirrel Damus tells Alex that Penny will return, because she is the one who will free the squirrels from their bondage to the Stacks and let them return to the Trees.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 04, 2015, 01:38:19 PM
Oh please Jmack, do this one, do this one!!!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 04, 2015, 01:46:49 PM
Oh please Jmack, do this one, do this one!!!

This
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 04, 2015, 01:49:33 PM
Nice, Jmack. Do eeeet.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 04, 2015, 02:02:20 PM
you HAVE to -- think of the squirrels, man!

THE SQUIRRELS!!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 04, 2015, 02:08:31 PM
you HAVE to -- think of the squirrels, man!

THE SQUIRRELS!!
;D

I think if we held another vote for likes in the section I would vote differently ::)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 04, 2015, 02:39:16 PM
you HAVE to -- think of the squirrels, man!

THE SQUIRRELS!!
;D

I think if we held another vote for likes in the section I would vote differently ::)
Funny you should say that, because I thought yesterday that we should totally do this vote again. ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 04, 2015, 02:40:31 PM
do it ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 05, 2015, 11:29:38 PM
Let's see, I've been staring at this blank screen for...20 minutes now. :-/


Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 06, 2015, 05:30:49 PM
Guys, where are your stories?
I don't want 2nd place by default >:(
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 06, 2015, 05:32:33 PM
Guys, where are your stories?
I don't want 2nd place by default >:(

I'm working at it, I'm working at it.
I just have to figure out how to reduce the entire book that has appeared in my mind down to 1,500 words and make it fit the prompt enough.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 06, 2015, 05:33:15 PM
erm... Henry, today's the 6th: there are still 25 days left in the month :P
People will be writing their stories as an excuse to get away from the family around Christmas ;)

the entire book that has appeared in my mind
;D
("think of the squirrels!!!")
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 06, 2015, 06:25:52 PM
i've got mine sketched out.

there might be kissing.

ewww...
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 06, 2015, 08:28:47 PM
Waiting for the last bit of homework to be done! And pondering if the plot works for non-romance readers.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 06, 2015, 08:29:56 PM
i've got mine sketched out.

there might be kissing.

ewww...


Gross, cooties.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 06, 2015, 10:39:57 PM
I've got 600 words down, an idea, a world, characters, but what I wrote isn't interesting yet. I need to let stuff simmer down.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 06, 2015, 11:40:08 PM
I also had an idea hit me. I was watching TV today and saw two dancers in a loving embrace. I think it was a diamond commercial, but this has given me my inspiration.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 07, 2015, 12:49:06 AM
862 words in and having an extreme attack of the Meh. Why can't my words match the wonderful stuff I'm thinking?

EDIT: 1,378 words and feeling a little better. This will read like the start of something longer, but oh well.

EDIT2: 1,841 words and done. Yeah. Cutting this down to size won't be easy.  :(
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 07, 2015, 03:36:27 AM
It's funny, we must have different processes, I've never over written my stories. At worst some 50 words too many, often none.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 07, 2015, 11:07:46 AM
It's funny, we must have different processes, I've never over written my stories. At worst some 50 words too many, often none.

These days I rarely over write by more than 50 words. This month is an exception because I know the actual longer narrative that I'm condensing.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 07, 2015, 02:41:27 PM
It's funny, we must have different processes, I've never over written my stories. At worst some 50 words too many, often none.

These days I rarely over write by more than 50 words. This month is an exception because I know the actual longer narrative that I'm condensing.

i think the most i've been over was 80-100 or so.  that was with the space opera one.  my last couple have actually been under by a few hundred words.  it's been weird.

oh, and this month, i'm going to make it a happy ending.  my last few have all been sad/tragic ends.  love -- it's all about happiness, right?
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 07, 2015, 03:21:40 PM
Usually my stories are well below the word limit, sometimes even 500-600 range.
The big exception was Cloud Eaters which was tough because I had to cut things and somehow tell a sensible story.
This month I'm back to normal though with Red Light Eyes.

Also. Bad endings are easier to write than happy ones. Go @m3mnoch (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40419)!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: OhTheSqualor on December 07, 2015, 03:48:59 PM
Man, I really want to force myself to do this.  I think it'd be a great exercise to put something out there for others to read and critique and rate.

But young love... gah.  Every time I even start to think about a potential story idea, my mind just goes blank.  Well almost blank.  There is a strong undertone of irritation.

Then of course, the enterprising part of my mind tells me: well, Chris.  It's important to develop your skills writing about various topics, even ones that aren't immediately attractive to you.  Especially those ones, in fact.

Are you guys having any luck?
Chris

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 07, 2015, 04:06:11 PM
It's funny, we must have different processes, I've never over written my stories. At worst some 50 words too many, often none.

These days I rarely over write by more than 50 words. This month is an exception because I know the actual longer narrative that I'm condensing.

i think the most i've been over was 80-100 or so.  that was with the space opera one.  my last couple have actually been under by a few hundred words.  it's been weird.

oh, and this month, i'm going to make it a happy ending.  my last few have all been sad/tragic ends.  love -- it's all about happiness, right?


I went so far over the word count last month that I could have made a submission and a half with what I cut out.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Rukaio_Alter on December 07, 2015, 04:16:48 PM
Usually I tend to wait mid-month before I begin writing up my story, simply so I have time to develop the idea better, but I've come up with such a fun premise that I've already gotten started on mine. And it's already coming out so delightfully silly.

Plus it features the return of ALL CAPS! What's not to love?
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: tebakutis on December 07, 2015, 04:43:53 PM
Usually I tend to wait mid-month before I begin writing up my story, simply so I have time to develop the idea better, but I've come up with such a fun premise that I've already gotten started on mine. And it's already coming out so delightfully silly.

Plus it features the return of ALL CAPS! What's not to love?

Bwahah, I look forward to reading that.

Interesting you guys mentioned word counts - for my part, I always write long. It's part of my first draft wordiness. But I can pretty much every time cut out enough words to keep the story I want. It's just a matter of latching onto details that I feel are important and cutting out those I realize repeat other details, repeat an idea I've already planted, or just don't pertain to what I'm trying to accomplish.

Oddly (and this is something I can't explain) I *have* gotten really good, over the last two years or so, at writing to the length I set out. With these writing contest stories, I've been consistently coming up with what is essentially a "1,500 word idea" where I feel like I can fit the whole story into that small word count.

When I write longer stories, my goal is usually 4k-5k, and I consistently hit that.

Also, as far as writing long, it tends to snowball as I write longer. With my latest novel, for example, it was at 120,000 when I finished it, and (thanks to my editor and my own additions) has dropped to 106,000 before publication. So that's 14,000 cuts without changing the story one bit.

I have too many words in my first drafts :)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Doctor_Chill on December 07, 2015, 06:59:15 PM
Chill has his own young love to worry about, let alone stressing over writing about it. ;)

Nah I might jump in this month. Been a while if anything.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 07, 2015, 07:02:32 PM
Chill has his own young love to worry about, let alone stressing over writing about it. ;)

Nah I might jump in this month. Been a while if anything.
Walk over to the king's paws and tell us about your young love. We're great at giving advice, seriously. ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Elfy on December 07, 2015, 08:28:46 PM
Man, I really want to force myself to do this.  I think it'd be a great exercise to put something out there for others to read and critique and rate.

But young love... gah.  Every time I even start to think about a potential story idea, my mind just goes blank.  Well almost blank.  There is a strong undertone of irritation.

Then of course, the enterprising part of my mind tells me: well, Chris.  It's important to develop your skills writing about various topics, even ones that aren't immediately attractive to you.  Especially those ones, in fact.

Are you guys having any luck?
Chris
I kind of felt the same way. In fact when I first saw the topic I think I threw up in my mouth a little. Then I calmed down and gave it some thought, and I think I managed to twist the topic enough to create a decent story out of it, despite that reading about this particular topic would probably make me put the book down, walk away from it and never speak of it again.
By the way, I'm another Chris (we seem to be taking over).
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: OhTheSqualor on December 07, 2015, 08:39:22 PM
Man, I really want to force myself to do this.  I think it'd be a great exercise to put something out there for others to read and critique and rate.

But young love... gah.  Every time I even start to think about a potential story idea, my mind just goes blank.  Well almost blank.  There is a strong undertone of irritation.

Then of course, the enterprising part of my mind tells me: well, Chris.  It's important to develop your skills writing about various topics, even ones that aren't immediately attractive to you.  Especially those ones, in fact.

Are you guys having any luck?
Chris
I kind of felt the same way. In fact when I first saw the topic I think I threw up in my mouth a little. Then I calmed down and gave it some thought, and I think I managed to twist the topic enough to create a decent story out of it, despite that reading about this particular topic would probably make me put the book down, walk away from it and never speak of it again.
By the way, I'm another Chris (we seem to be taking over).

Shhh, don't tell them about the secret master plan for world domination.   ;-)

I didn't quite throw up in my mouth, but my gut had a similar reaction.

I'll be sure to check out your piece.  Maybe it'll inspire me.

Chris
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 07, 2015, 10:12:36 PM
Man, I really want to force myself to do this.  I think it'd be a great exercise to put something out there for others to read and critique and rate.

But young love... gah.  Every time I even start to think about a potential story idea, my mind just goes blank.  Well almost blank.  There is a strong undertone of irritation.

Then of course, the enterprising part of my mind tells me: well, Chris.  It's important to develop your skills writing about various topics, even ones that aren't immediately attractive to you.  Especially those ones, in fact.

Are you guys having any luck?
Chris
I kind of felt the same way. In fact when I first saw the topic I think I threw up in my mouth a little. Then I calmed down and gave it some thought, and I think I managed to twist the topic enough to create a decent story out of it, despite that reading about this particular topic would probably make me put the book down, walk away from it and never speak of it again.
By the way, I'm another Chris (we seem to be taking over).

Shhh, don't tell them about the secret master plan for world domination.   ;-)

I didn't quite throw up in my mouth, but my gut had a similar reaction.

I'll be sure to check out your piece.  Maybe it'll inspire me.

Chris

what?  is someone calling all chris's?

here!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Doctor_Chill on December 07, 2015, 11:04:39 PM
Chill has his own young love to worry about, let alone stressing over writing about it. ;)

Nah I might jump in this month. Been a while if anything.
Walk over to the king's paws and tell us about your young love. We're great at giving advice, seriously. ;)

You guys and advice? Hah!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 07, 2015, 11:12:59 PM
Chill has his own young love to worry about, let alone stressing over writing about it. ;)

Nah I might jump in this month. Been a while if anything.
Walk over to the king's paws and tell us about your young love. We're great at giving advice, seriously. ;)

You guys and advice? Hah!
You've travelled with us for so long and so far away, and don't believe we give good advice? Now I'm hurt :'(
Let old Scarlet help the Doc ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 08, 2015, 07:30:25 AM
Man, I really want to force myself to do this.  I think it'd be a great exercise to put something out there for others to read and critique and rate.

But young love... gah.  Every time I even start to think about a potential story idea, my mind just goes blank.  Well almost blank.  There is a strong undertone of irritation.

Then of course, the enterprising part of my mind tells me: well, Chris.  It's important to develop your skills writing about various topics, even ones that aren't immediately attractive to you.  Especially those ones, in fact.

Are you guys having any luck?
Chris
I kind of felt the same way. In fact when I first saw the topic I think I threw up in my mouth a little. Then I calmed down and gave it some thought, and I think I managed to twist the topic enough to create a decent story out of it, despite that reading about this particular topic would probably make me put the book down, walk away from it and never speak of it again.
By the way, I'm another Chris (we seem to be taking over).

Shhh, don't tell them about the secret master plan for world domination.   ;-)

I didn't quite throw up in my mouth, but my gut had a similar reaction.

I'll be sure to check out your piece.  Maybe it'll inspire me.

Chris

what?  is someone calling all chris's?

here!
We are way too common. :'(
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 08, 2015, 08:38:33 AM
Your name may be common, but you're all uniquely special 8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 08, 2015, 08:45:32 AM
Your name may be common, but you're all uniquely special 8)

All together now: Yes we are all uniquely special...

...

 ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 08, 2015, 09:16:46 AM
Your name may be common, but you're all uniquely special 8)

All together now: Yes we are all uniquely special...

...

 ;D
Let's not make fun, us with the truly unique names ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: OhTheSqualor on December 08, 2015, 09:55:13 PM
Your name may be common, but you're all uniquely special 8)

All together now: Yes we are all uniquely special...

...

 ;D

I'm a unique snowflake, and so are you!

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 09, 2015, 12:05:56 AM
Your name may be common, but you're all uniquely special 8)
All together now: Yes we are all uniquely special...
 ;D
I'm a unique snowflake, and so are you!

And you can achieve anything if you just reach for the stars!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: SugoiMe on December 09, 2015, 05:29:17 AM
Trumped me with this theme. When I think of young love, I think of cheesy, sappy romance. Maybe that's what I'll write, but I need some sort of twist, or some quirk to spice it up.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 09, 2015, 07:29:19 AM
Trumped me with this theme. When I think of young love, I think of cheesy, sappy romance. Maybe that's what I'll write, but I need some sort of twist, or some quirk to spice it up.

Why does it have to be sappy or cheesy?

Taken literally, 'young love' is young people, in love. Well, we have a genre full of teenage royals, assassins, thieves, exiles, pirates. War and politics and quests to defeat evil. Falling in love with the chosen one has to be awkward: falling in love when you're in the middle of a war is also awk. Or when you are both training to be wizards and are drunk on power and infatuation, or not 100% sure if the cute girl from Elemental Theory actually loves you back, or if she's going to keep being ambitious as hell (or is she going to literally stab you in the back to knock out the competition).

It is what people make it, I think.

(Though I am laughing a bit at most people's reactions to the idea of romance being this thing of cliched horror. Last romance novel I finished, the heroine's a single mother and an ex-drug addict, and the hero is an ex-and-trying-to-stay-ex career criminal. And then there was that series set in the Regency with a connecting cast of injured and/or PTSD-y veterans from the Napoleonic War... )
Title: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 09, 2015, 08:47:02 AM
I agree there may be a lot of cheesy romance out there, but that doesn't mean you have to write one.

Love is a powerful and honest feeling and the opposite of cheesy. It's darn hard to write about it and staying true without drifting towards all the clichés.

That only makes it more of a challenge for you.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 12, 2015, 07:08:51 PM
I was thinking of starting in the Montly Writing Contests, but maybe I should wait next month  ::) 

Or... maybe I should give it a shot.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 12, 2015, 08:27:11 PM
I was thinking of starting in the Montly Writing Contests, but maybe I should wait next month  ::) 

Or... maybe I should give it a shot.

you should totally give it a shot.  what better month to start than the one where we're all like "um... okay"?  after all, misery loves company!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 13, 2015, 12:38:10 AM
I was thinking of starting in the Montly Writing Contests, but maybe I should wait next month  ::) 

Or... maybe I should give it a shot.

Go for it!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: SugoiMe on December 13, 2015, 03:12:36 AM
Quote
8. This is a writing contest, not a "I have written something like this ten years ago" contest. So if you happen to have a story that fits one of the themes, I'd like it to have a mayor overhaul/edit. Work for it. ;)

I have a scene that could work, but I need to check to see if it needs a "major edit."  If it doesn't, then it's either a cute little romance between toddlers (if that's even possible) or something about a half fish girl.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 16, 2015, 02:12:47 PM
Walks in. Looks around. Coughs.

Maybe I'll start working on this today.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 16, 2015, 06:02:33 PM
yeah.  i worked a bit on mine yesterday.  i'm liking the opening.  i just have to figure out how to write the romantic part next.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 18, 2015, 04:42:02 PM
yeah.  i worked a bit on mine yesterday.  i'm liking the opening.  i just have to figure out how to write the romantic part next.

heh.  600 words in, i just laid out the setup, and now i need to start in on the actual dialog.  about 700 words worth.

here are my notes for that 700 words:
> They talk.  It’s cute.  He’s naive, but clever.  She’s crusty, but longing for hope.

/sigh

c'mon inspiration!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Mr.J on December 18, 2015, 07:29:58 PM
Wrote mine but if I'm honest its basically just sex.

So don't think I'm gonna post that :P its also over word count.

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 18, 2015, 08:07:01 PM
I still have to get back to mine that's sitting at 1,800 words.
Or... I did come up with a second idea.

I kind of want to write the second because it's more about young love, and the first is so much just a condensation of a much bigger idea.
Title: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 20, 2015, 10:02:24 PM
just finished the first draft.  1498 words.  the wife is giving it a look.  see if i need to scrap anything.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 21, 2015, 02:10:07 AM
just finished the first draft.  1498 words.  the wife is giving it a look.  see if i need to scrap anything.
boo.

she hated the twist because the reason was too subtle.

damn.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 21, 2015, 05:49:09 AM
just finished the first draft.  1498 words.  the wife is giving it a look.  see if i need to scrap anything.
boo.

she hated the twist because the reason was too subtle.

damn.
Could it be that she's not used to subtlety from you? ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 21, 2015, 06:43:12 AM
just finished the first draft.  1498 words.  the wife is giving it a look.  see if i need to scrap anything.
boo.

she hated the twist because the reason was too subtle.

damn.
Could it be that she's not used to subtlety from you? ;)

WHAT IS THIS SUBTLE THING YOU SPEAK OF?!?
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 21, 2015, 07:53:19 AM
I have a really, really cute idea, but, gah, what is time.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 21, 2015, 11:16:54 AM
How did it get to be be December 21?
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 21, 2015, 12:38:11 PM
How did it get to be be December 21?
One day after the other? ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: wakarimasen on December 21, 2015, 01:50:04 PM
I'm not going to make this one. Shame, would have been nice to trot out my emotionally sensitive side.  ;)
But I'm too busy binge watching anime with the kids and getting smashed on mulled wine.

I promise to vote and will try for next month instead.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 21, 2015, 01:59:40 PM
How did it get to be be December 21?
One day after the other? ;)

Nah. That can't be it.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 21, 2015, 04:52:49 PM
just finished the first draft.  1498 words.  the wife is giving it a look.  see if i need to scrap anything.
boo.

she hated the twist because the reason was too subtle.

damn.

whew.  okay.  i threw out about 300 words and remade the ending.  hopefully this gets 'wife approval'.  if so, i might be posting it this afternoon.  i even have a fancy image to go with it!  production values, yo!

on the bright side, she liked the middle conversation piece!  yay!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 22, 2015, 06:03:09 AM
just finished the first draft.  1498 words.  the wife is giving it a look.  see if i need to scrap anything.
boo.

she hated the twist because the reason was too subtle.

damn.

whew.  okay.  i threw out about 300 words and remade the ending.  hopefully this gets 'wife approval'.  if so, i might be posting it this afternoon.  i even have a fancy image to go with it!  production values, yo!

on the bright side, she liked the middle conversation piece!  yay!

alrighty.  i'm in.

mrs. m3mnoch still hated it, but for the right reasons -- you can't tell a proper love story in 1500 words without it feeling rushed.  there was much arm-flailing as she was telling me this.  (i won't disclose which of us was actually flailing their arms, tho)

at least the plot twist came in clear this time.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 23, 2015, 01:46:28 AM
i think i'm going to change my submission to just this link:
http://www.starwars.com/games-apps/star-wars-crawl-creator/?cid=5679fc94e4b0d67b2e57f999
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 23, 2015, 01:51:03 AM
Good job on finishing it. I'm actually unsure if I will be able to do it.

I keep plowing through my main story, but when it comes to the monthly, I simply hit a wall trying to put it together in paper, despite having a somewhat clear picture of it in my head. I spent almost two hours staring at the screen, walking around and just ended up deleting stuff  >:(

 
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 23, 2015, 02:43:09 AM
Good job on finishing it. I'm actually unsure if I will be able to do it.

I keep plowing through my main story, but when it comes to the monthly, I simply hit a wall trying to put it together in paper, despite having a somewhat clear picture of it in my head. I spent almost two hours staring at the screen, walking around and just ended up deleting stuff  >:(

Well, isn't it more of a reason for you to keep at it? It's not like you, since you write so much all the time. Maybe start writing from scratch, since you have a picture clear in your head? You write a thousand word in a day easily, so even if the quality is rough, you can try and put it down and then spend a couple of days just editing deeply, no?

I'm not sure I'll make it myself. My own story is pretty lame, completely stuck, rather unoriginal, and I'm busy looking for a new place to live in...
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 23, 2015, 03:13:22 AM
I am bowing out this month I think. I can't get anything satisfying onto the page. 3 attempts with nothing to show, plus a busy week ahead. Ah well. I'll be back next month.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ryanmcgowan on December 23, 2015, 03:30:02 AM
I cant believe its been almost a whole year since my last entry (January Sci-Fi).  Off the back of last months failure to write anything on my phone and with my laptop still dead, I have managed to knock out something on my iphones tiny screen this week.  Here's hoping it may just be enough of a beginning to warrant completing before this months deadline.  Not sure how well it meets the brief though.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 23, 2015, 08:37:34 AM
I have to write a poem for a girl for christmas day and am finding it a lot harder than this story  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 23, 2015, 10:10:23 AM
I have to write a poem for a girl for christmas day and am finding it a lot harder than this story  :P
Post it in the Writer's Corner, we'll help you. :D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 23, 2015, 10:15:23 AM
I have to write a poem for a girl for christmas day and am finding it a lot harder than this story  :P
Post it in the Writer's Corner, we'll help you. :D

So you're "love experts"?  ;D

(https://jannabushaw.files.wordpress.com/2014/04/1000px-meetmyfamily-lol.png)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 23, 2015, 10:29:47 AM
I have to write a poem for a girl for christmas day and am finding it a lot harder than this story  :P
Post it in the Writer's Corner, we'll help you. :D

So you're "love experts"?  ;D

(https://jannabushaw.files.wordpress.com/2014/04/1000px-meetmyfamily-lol.png)
I guess that makes you a little bit of a fixer-upper?  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 23, 2015, 10:32:07 AM
I have to write a poem for a girl for christmas day and am finding it a lot harder than this story  :P
Post it in the Writer's Corner, we'll help you. :D

So you're "love experts"?  ;D

(https://jannabushaw.files.wordpress.com/2014/04/1000px-meetmyfamily-lol.png)
I guess that makes you a little bit of a fixer-upper?  :P
Ouch
You got me  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 23, 2015, 11:28:45 AM
I cant believe its been almost a whole year since my last entry (January Sci-Fi).  Off the back of last months failure to write anything on my phone and with my laptop still dead, I have managed to knock out something on my iphones tiny screen this week.  Here's hoping it may just be enough of a beginning to warrant completing before this months deadline.  Not sure how well it meets the brief though.

@ryanmcgowan (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=33850), welcome back to the contest!
Do it, write it. Yeah, I'm working an idea that isn't as strong a fit to the theme as I'd like, but it's the story asking to be written.

Hope can can get it down so we can share it.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 23, 2015, 02:47:52 PM
I have to write a poem for a girl for christmas day and am finding it a lot harder than this story  :P
Post it in the Writer's Corner, we'll help you. :D

So you're "love experts"?  ;D

(https://jannabushaw.files.wordpress.com/2014/04/1000px-meetmyfamily-lol.png)
I guess that makes you a little bit of a fixer-upper?  :P
Ouch
You got me  :P

oh we're totally love experts!  especially jmack and i -- we've been married for decades, so we know what it's like to woo a young, new love with sweet words.

...

hrm.

come to think of it, this may be harder than i first thought.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 23, 2015, 04:22:08 PM
We are totally the best people to help Henry woo a girl :D
At least we have the best will in the world hehe
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Doctor_Chill on December 23, 2015, 06:00:42 PM
*coughs discreetly*

I got you, Henry.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 23, 2015, 07:38:07 PM
Third version. 1,988 words.
ARGGHHHH!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 23, 2015, 08:01:01 PM
Third version. 1,988 words.
ARGGHHHH!

ouch.

them's gonna be some painful cuts.

/feels

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on December 23, 2015, 08:37:28 PM
Third version. 1,988 words.
ARGGHHHH!
Try to remove words next, instead of adding them.  ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: night_wrtr on December 23, 2015, 09:30:52 PM
Third version. 1,988 words.
ARGGHHHH!

I know that feel, bro.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 26, 2015, 07:13:59 PM
1,499 words.
Now waiting for beta comments.
Had to give up a lot of things that will come back when i write this out fully.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 26, 2015, 07:25:26 PM
You can still add another word ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 26, 2015, 08:48:05 PM
You can still add another word ;D
Add at the bottom:

~  Fin
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 27, 2015, 02:34:02 AM
Can't believe I actually finished it. Well, more like a first draft. No editing, so it's a total piece of crap so far. And it's 2.500 words, but I know a big part that will get cut, at least.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 27, 2015, 12:35:58 PM
6 entries, 4 days left to go...
Come on, get those creative romantic juices flowing ;D actually, who said it has to be romantic? hmmmm
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 27, 2015, 12:53:44 PM
Honestly not sure I'll make it. I'm sick with coughing, my story is quite atmospheric (I guess?) but rather boring. Not sure it's worth the hassle.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 27, 2015, 02:53:38 PM
Honestly not sure I'll make it. I'm sick with coughing, my story is quite atmospheric (I guess?) but rather boring. Not sure it's worth the hassle.

Excuses, excuses.  ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 27, 2015, 09:17:18 PM
My PC was with a lot of noise, so I decided to clean it and replace the thermal thing on the processor.

When I went to put back the cooler, broke one of the...locking legs (oh, the vocabulary of Lanko). Already had 2 broken ones. Had a spare cooler, got two locking legs and replaced them. Then broke those two again when locking them into the motherboard...

Now my cabinet is open and horizontally placed. It's working, at least and the noise disappeared. Just another reminder to make a backup of stuff.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ryanmcgowan on December 29, 2015, 01:02:55 AM
First draft finished! its barely readable, but I got something down.
Hopefully get enough time to make something out of it.
Also, typing 1,500 words on a tiny little phone is terrible, I need to get my laptop fixed.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ryanmcgowan on December 29, 2015, 02:55:35 AM
Woop! its readable.  Will work on it a little more before submitting, but its a proper start at writing again, been too long.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 29, 2015, 04:21:54 AM
From 2.600 words to 1.435.

Still needs polishing, but now I'm certain it will be posted!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 29, 2015, 01:51:52 PM
Well for once I might end up writing too much and cutting down. I wrote two double pages on notebook today, that would be nice to layer things down if it were a 2k story but as it is, I'll have to experience the famous cutting stage.
I'm pleased with what I have though, so I'll keep over working and try to edit quickly tomorrow.  :-[
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 29, 2015, 03:53:22 PM
Posted the story yesterday.
Today: 1,000+ words into a second Young Love story.

Hmmm... if I finish it, will I need to get people to vote on whether I un-post yesterday's and post today's?
Or must Atku make a reappearance to post the seond. But, no, that would be cheating.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: SugoiMe on December 29, 2015, 07:01:24 PM
I'm amazed that you guys write so much. When I write, it's a strange skeletal creature in need of some flesh.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on December 29, 2015, 07:22:10 PM
I'm amazed that you guys write so much. When I write, it's a strange skeletal creature in need of some flesh.

I can't wait to read about a strange skeletal creature in need of flesh that experiences first love...
 :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Doctor_Chill on December 29, 2015, 07:23:52 PM
I'm amazed that you guys write so much. When I write, it's a strange skeletal creature in need of some flesh.

I can't wait to read about a strange skeletal creature in need of flesh that experiences first love...
 :P

This is why we need likes. ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: SugoiMe on December 29, 2015, 07:27:59 PM
It's called the Corpse Bride.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 29, 2015, 07:29:42 PM
I'm amazed that you guys write so much. When I write, it's a strange skeletal creature in need of some flesh.

I can't wait to read about a strange skeletal creature in need of flesh that experiences first love...
 :P

This is why we need likes. ;D
You spoke my mind ;D

It's called the Corpse Bride.
;D she was cute
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on December 29, 2015, 08:11:28 PM
I'm amazed that you guys write so much. When I write, it's a strange skeletal creature in need of some flesh.

I can't wait to read about a strange skeletal creature in need of flesh that experiences first love...
 :P

This is why we need likes. ;D
You spoke my mind ;D

It's called the Corpse Bride.
;D she was cute

moar likes!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ryanmcgowan on December 29, 2015, 11:24:47 PM
Thumbs rejoice! my entry is in for this month and my phone has been abandoned!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ryanmcgowan on December 30, 2015, 07:59:46 PM
Can anyone recommend any good on-line resources (Podcasts, websites, etc) for punctuation and the correct uses there off?

I've found the Poynter Institute's podcast "Roy's Writing Tools" particularly helpful for the more technical aspects of writing, but it only briefly touches on punctuation.

Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 30, 2015, 08:06:41 PM
I think there was something on the resources stash I read once.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ryanmcgowan on December 30, 2015, 08:51:23 PM
Cheers Nora, I'll have a dig through
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 30, 2015, 09:12:29 PM
Cheers Nora, I'll have a dig through

That's the one : http://www.be-a-better-writer.com/punctuate-dialogue.html
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 30, 2015, 09:45:26 PM
Come on, @Lanko (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40739) and @wakarimasen (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40242) it's the last day, come and publish!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 30, 2015, 09:46:42 PM
What? Isn't it tomorrow?  :o
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Nora on December 30, 2015, 09:55:46 PM
Ah well, I'm in Australia, it's the 31st now.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 30, 2015, 09:59:37 PM
That was scary. You did that on purpose, didn't you?  8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 31, 2015, 10:15:51 AM
Just a little scare to push you on ;)

Anyway, I'm not locking the submission thread today (after all, at the end of my day it's still the 31st for you and americans), and then tomorrow I'm travelling in the morning, so I'll probably only lock it in the afternoon - or later, if people ask nicely ;D

FYI, I'll only create the voting/critique threads on Monday 4th, since I'm out for the weekend and it's crazy to do that on a tablet...
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 31, 2015, 11:32:53 AM
I'm really struggling to find uninterrupted writing time. There's little kids visiting, and apparently they like their uncle too much to let him out of their sight for longer than a few minutes at a time (and I'm always too tired to write after they go to sleep).

[sighs]

I'm only about 200 words in at the moment but I know pretty well what I'm going to write. So, maybe I'll be able to finish it before tomorrow afternoon. [shrugs]  :-\

In January I set out to partake in every writing contest here this year. To fail this close to the finish line would be... awful/sad/depressing. Hmm. I guess, I better not fail then.  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 31, 2015, 12:07:27 PM
*whispers*
I can wait for you (and anyone else) until Saturday ;)

Nieces and nephews definitely need time with uncles/aunts :D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 31, 2015, 12:43:59 PM
Thank you, but I don't know... that would feel like cheating.  ;)   I'll just have to try to finish my story by tomorrow afternoon.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on December 31, 2015, 06:45:05 PM
Ok - I've checked this year's contests and mostly they closed on the 1st of the following month, so tomorrow afternoon is a good target.

Go on people, you can do it! Who needs to watch fireworks, just write your story 8)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on December 31, 2015, 07:25:23 PM
So I read two stories to my wife and my new step-mother, because I just finished a second Young Love story today. They both voted for leaving in the one I'd posted previously, even though they liked the new one too.

Therefore, for your reading pleasure, here is the second story. It's very unedited, but I hope folks enjoy it.

**A BETROTHAL**

"Psst!" Marita was bored. Her future husband was the only person in range of a whisper, which was all  she could get away with in this room crowded with priests, politicians, and parents. The urge to speak had been building from the moment her mother had ordered her to say nothing, and was now a physical pain.

Her future husband, his imperial eminence the prince, sat silent, his body hurting from the preemptive whipping he'd been given while the emperor watched, noting the date in his ledger. It would take more than 'psst' to make him disobey.

"Psst! No one can hear us." The priests had set up a droning chant, underlaid with drums and chimes. "If we're going to be married, we should start getting to know each other." The annoying boy just sat there, staring ahead as if she didn't exist. Marita was quite confident of her own existence, although she wondered about everyone else. They were there, they went about their business, but they didn't seem alive. Very few people stopped to really see anything. A bird could land on their nose, and they'd just continue doing whatever they'd been doing.

Marita tried again. "If a bird landed on your nose, what would you do?" She was gratified to see the prince's eyes dart over. She'd surprised him.

A trio of priests circled them, swinging incense. It tickled the prince's nose and made his eyes water. He tried blank his mind, but into that space came her question: 'What if a bird landed on your nose?' He'd brush it away; it might peck out his eyes. But what would he do if one landed on his nose right now, in the middle of the betrothal ceremony, when he'd been ordered to sit utterly still? He'd noticed birds flitting about in the rafters of the temple. Where were they now? He glanced up, then at the girl. He caught a tiny smirk on her lips.

The priests went back to their places, the future bride and groom properly fumigated. Marita said, "If we were alone right now, what would you do?" She'd been thinking that one up for the last few minutes. It was all she could do to stifle laughter. She looked for his reaction.

The prince's thoughts were spinning, but he kept control of his features. It wasn't as though he hadn't imagined his wedding night. But the girl herself hadn't been sitting a just feet away, mocking him with her eyes. He thought that if they were completely alone together, he'd just spank her. Then he realized what he'd be spanking, and his face went hot. She crossed her eyes and stuck out her tongue. This was what he'd be married to? How would he ever keep a straight face when they had official business together?

"What's your name?" asked Marita.

What a strange question. Of course she knew his name. Was she stupid? He glanced over and their eyes met. No. She was far from stupid. She was positively dangerous.

The chanting stopped, and the golden doors of the hall were opened to reveal a train of gifts making its way toward the dais: working of ivory, gold, silk, and more, each delivered by some distant place desiring them good health and a fertile future. Five years early, thought Marita, and a silly custom anyway, though she did like the seashell chess set. With each gift, she and the prince had to stand, recite formalities, then sit again. By the fiftieth, her knees were shaking and her thighs ached. She stole a look at the prince, and admired his stoic patience. Well, if he can stand it, I can.

When they sat for the final time, they found they were surrounded by stacks of gifts piled so high that  no one could see them. It took Marita just a moment to appreciate this unexpected change. She turned on her bench to face the prince.

"What is your name?" she repeated, and added, "Your eminence," just in case he was one of those types. She didn't think he was, but you don't start a dance by insulting your partner.

"What's yours?" whispered the prince. She smiled, and it lit the shadows in his heart.

"You first," she said.

"Prince Emit kra Maras Gurgido Borad Daran." She is so pretty, he thought. He'd have a pretty wife.

"That's not it," said Marita. "Your name is what you call yourself. Those names are the costume you put on each morning. What's your _name_?"

He thought about it for longer than he needed to, because, of course his name was Emmy. It's what his sister had called him. It was the fellow who looked back at him from the mirror. It was a very private name.

"It's all right," said Marita, seeing his hesitation. She could respect that; they'd just met. "I'm Marita."

"Marita," he echoed. "I'm very pleased to meet you, Princess Marita."

"Thank you." She considered how to move forward. He was a challenge, this boy - this man - she'd be marrying. "Do you enjoy games?"

Tilts, thought Emmy. I like tilts. His father had him whipped for wasting time on it when he should have been studying.

"I like chess," said Marita.

Chess. He wasn't surprised.

"I like tilts," he said.

She frowned. "Too much chance."

"No. It's what you do with chance."

Marita smiled to herself. Give him a chance, and this unnamed prince might work out. She decided to stop trying to guide the conversation and waited.

Emmy really looked at Marita. Yes, she was pretty, with a long neck, wide nostrils, high forehead, and flawless brown skin, but he saw other things too. Stubborn. Strong. He'd thought her dangerous, but a better word was _aware_, which amounted to the same thing. Here they were, sixteen years old. Most people would be married at this age, but they were forced to wait five years. How much more aware would she be at twenty-one? And how had he gone from almost dreading the marriage to wondering why they had to wait?

"We'll write letters," he said.

"That would be good," she said.

"Five years," he said.

"It's our wedding night," she said.

He reddened again. "It won't have been my first time. I just want you to know."

"It's alright," she answered. "But you won't ever tell me about that."

"No," he said.

"And see," she said, taking a fur robe from the pile of treasures and rolling it into a small, oblong shape. "Our first child."

"She's beautiful," he said.

"She? Aren't we supposed to bring forth the next emperor?"

"Yes," he said. "But he will come."

"Here he is," said Marita, holding the folded robe out to him.

He took it awkwardly. "He's handsome?"

"He's ugly," she laughed. "All babies are ugly at first."

"Are they?" He stared at the robe, imagining his son. He smiled a huge smile, and shook out the robe. "Look," he said. "His first horse. He's a fine rider."

Marita picked up her stool and brought it over next to the prince, closing the distance between them. "And his sister is so smart. We sent her to the university last year. It was very wise of you, even though your advisers argued against it."

The prince looked into Marita's eyes, and saw determination and loss. "Yes," he said. "I see that now." He closed his eyes, letting his mind touch on the future. "My father has died," he said. Marita swallowed at the cold in his voice.

"I'm sorry," said Marita.

"Don't be," he said. "I'm emperor now."

"Hush!"

"I'm emperor, and you are the empress."

"But it's good we we waited for our time. Better this way."

The prince opened his eyes. "Yes," he said reluctantly. "This is better."

"I saw a grey hair in my mirror today," she said, changing the subject.

"You should it pluck out."

"No," she said. "Maybe the imperial council will respect me now."

"They started to respect you when you threatened to have them banished."

"Well," she smiled. "That was fear, not respect."

"Our son will be a great ruler after me," said the prince.

"What is our son's name?" asked Marita, touching the prince's hand. "His real name?"

He looked into his wife's eyes. "Emmy," he said. "His sister called him Emmy. But she died, and left him alone."

Marita's hands went to her mouth. "No!" she protested. "How did it happen?"

"Red fever," he said, as though a foot pressed on his chest. "Life takes away the things that make it worth living."

"And gives us others," Marita answered.

They were silent until the drone of the priests pricked at their illusion.

"Will you marry me?" asked Emmy.

"As many times as you want," she said.

Servants took down the wall of gifts, and they had no more time alone together. The ceremony stretched on, the two of them united in impatience with pretense and time.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on December 31, 2015, 08:16:58 PM
Hmm... we haven't even started anything, but just realised we've entered for 12 months straight. Wonder if we'll be able to come up with something in time to keep it going...  :-\
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 31, 2015, 08:32:41 PM
My love story just reached 1.666 words  ::)

Should have written about an angel and demon/fallen angel, now that I think about it.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on December 31, 2015, 09:20:51 PM
It's the first here, and ahhhhhhhhhhhhh. I know contest isn't closed yet, but, pretty sure I'm not going to finish my story in time :-(
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on December 31, 2015, 10:00:15 PM
I'm at about 700 words. Gonna take a break for the change of year.
Happy New Year from Finland!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on December 31, 2015, 10:12:55 PM
1.497! Finally!

What a roller coaster. I wrote about 2k. Then went to 2600. Ruthlessly cut to 1450. Increased to about 1700. Then a long Ping-Pong between 1400-1600 yesterday and today.

But I have only myself to blame, I should have edited slowly instead of just leaving it for so late, and doing everything in like, two or three days. Now I wish I had worked this more carefully. Maybe I should have cut the other half and expanded the first or vice-versa.

Oh well, first time I did this. I learned. Let all know that when Lanko first finished something, it was with love! 
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on January 01, 2016, 12:27:22 AM
We've written almost 400 words now, but we have to sleep soon. Hopefully we have time to finish it off and give it a look over tomorrow!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on January 01, 2016, 03:30:33 AM
And I've finished! Finally! Hopefully it's at least cute (unlike the last time I wrote about Salia, for the Grimdark contest - not that it'd be hard to be a happier fic than that one.) The characters also come from a world and story I'm working on, although normally they are much older, so I hope the worldbuilding bits all make sense, too.

And hopefully one being a werewolf and the other being a vampire (even a very odd kind of vampire) doesn't detract too much  ;)
Title: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on January 01, 2016, 03:45:49 AM
woo hoo!  nice work!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: AshKB on January 01, 2016, 07:04:13 AM
And now that I can read the other entries (so far! still time for those who haven't submitted yet!), wow, I'm really enjoying these. Voting's going to be tough.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on January 01, 2016, 07:48:48 AM
Now 12 stories and there's still about 10 hours to go - I'm really proud of you guys :D ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: xiagan on January 01, 2016, 10:07:36 AM
Now 12 stories and there's still about 10 hours to go - I'm really proud of you guys :D ;)

As am I! :) Happy New Year and new contest will be up soon! :)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on January 01, 2016, 12:22:33 PM
Now 12 stories and there's still about 10 hours to go - I'm really proud of you guys :D ;)
So you close it at about 6 PM your time?
Oh, I can do this before that. I'm almost finished, nearing 1500 words. Will need to do some serious editing, though.  ::)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on January 01, 2016, 03:01:38 PM
Now 12 stories and there's still about 10 hours to go - I'm really proud of you guys :D ;)

As am I! :) Happy New Year and new contest will be up soon! :)

yup.  and i'll have the ebooks up as soon as the voting thread comes online.  (that's where the script strips the titles and names)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on January 01, 2016, 04:36:33 PM
OK, I can do it around 6 my time :)
The voting thread will only be done Monday, though.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on January 01, 2016, 06:27:17 PM
Thank you, Bea!

My story is out there. I kind of maybe edited it after your 6 PM, though. Please don't disqualify me.  :)

I really would have liked to have used more time writing my story, but the damn holidays got in the way.  :P (I'm not sure about that sentence, but I don't have the energy to care.  ::) )

What about @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290)? Any update on your story?  :-\
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on January 01, 2016, 06:28:58 PM
What about @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290)? Any update on your story?  :-\
We decided not to bother, since neither of us really liked our story much...  :-\
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on January 01, 2016, 06:34:15 PM
What about @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290)? Any update on your story?  :-\
We decided not to bother, since neither of us really liked our story much...  :-\
:'(
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on January 01, 2016, 06:38:43 PM
What about @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290)? Any update on your story?  :-\
We decided not to bother, since neither of us really liked our story much...  :-\
:'(
Not much we can do really! (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: m3mnoch on January 01, 2016, 06:46:49 PM
sadness.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on January 01, 2016, 06:55:44 PM
Not much we can do really! (https://d.gr-assets.com/hostedimages/1380222758ra/241132.gif)
Yeah.
Still, this:
sadness.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on January 01, 2016, 09:13:52 PM
We could post what we've got in the critiques forum so you can see how bad it is if you want. Maybe then you'd feel less sad that we didn't enter.  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ArcaneArtsVelho on January 02, 2016, 09:46:35 AM
We could post what we've got in the critiques forum so you can see how bad it is if you want. Maybe then you'd feel less sad that we didn't enter.  :P
Do it.  8)
(If you want to.)

I mean, surely it can't be worse than mine.  ;D
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on January 02, 2016, 01:28:01 PM
I think an illustrated story about the meeting of @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290) would have swept Young Love.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Raptori on January 02, 2016, 05:03:03 PM
I mean, surely it can't be worse than mine.  ;D
No chance - your stories are usually pretty good, and our one is even worse usual.  ;)

I think an illustrated story about the meeting of @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290) would have swept Young Love.
Maybe, though I doubt we'd have been able to pull it off. Besides, wouldn't illustrations be cheating?  :P
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Lanko on January 02, 2016, 05:05:19 PM
I think an illustrated story about the meeting of @Raptori (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=38840) and @Saurus (http://fantasy-faction.com/forum/index.php?action=profile;u=40290) would have swept Young Love.

And they could be cats. Maybe they are cats. Intelligent, bookaholic cats using the internet and making fun of us humans. Plot twist.
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: wakarimasen on January 04, 2016, 03:58:07 PM
Missed this month... no surprise there what with Kids and christmas etc.
Will try not to let that stop me shooting my mouth off about everyone else's entries when voting ;)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on January 04, 2016, 05:07:19 PM
Missed this month... no surprise there what with Kids and christmas etc.
Will try not to let that stop me shooting my mouth off about everyone else's entries when voting ;)

I'm looking forward to it!
Bring on the drubbing (of other people)!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: JMack on January 15, 2016, 03:23:40 PM
Thought some folks might find this amusing.
Story board for my Young Love submission. Now you know how I spend some of the time in my office:
(http://i.imgur.com/LzxGe78.jpg)
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: Henry Dale on January 15, 2016, 03:28:05 PM
Too much white space  >:(
Fill that board up with plot!
Title: Re: [DEC 2015] - Young Love - Discussion Thread
Post by: ScarletBea on January 15, 2016, 08:30:20 PM
I assume you have your own office then ;) (I'm open space...)