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Who wrote the best poem in April?

Azrael.
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poochletty
10 (55.6%)
AshKB
3 (16.7%)
CatSinister
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Dan D Jones
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Jeni
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Louise
0 (0%)
Shadowsun
0 (0%)
TheSameer
1 (5.6%)
SincereReadingKW
3 (16.7%)
Saint Niddle
1 (5.6%)

Total Members Voted: 18

Voting closed: May 28, 2012, 10:03:24 PM

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #15 on: April 07, 2012, 10:44:47 PM »
Okay I haven't written poetry since I left school. But something prompted me to write this in the space of half an hour. Honestly, I blame listening to too much Sons of Perdition. They certainly had more than a little influence over whatever the hell this is. (Which, by the way, I have no idea what exactly it is). :P It flows kinda like lyrics though, so I guess that's what I was intending.


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The last rite.

It used to be some big rite, back when we then cared.
There was chanting and singing and the old gods all stared.
Now it’s barely a custom, done just for show.
But why? is the question to the answer I know.

They gave you three bullets, all dirty with rust.
One fired in the air, and one into dust.
And the third was the sweetest, that we all came to dread,
For they fired right into the back of your head.

Ten years for my country, for the old gods I fought
To bring them conversion, the purging they sought
But they were wolves in sheep’s clothing and devils in masks,
And the blood on my hands couldn’t sate their repast.

They gave you three bullets, all dirty with rust.
One fired in the air, and one into dust.
And the third was the sweetest, that we all came to dread,
For they fired right into the back of your head.

They caught me and dragged me away to be bound,
To return, they said, my soul to the ground,
They gave me three bullets, all dirty with rust.
One fired in the air, and one into dust.

But the third was the sweetest, that I came to dread,
For they fired right into the back of my head.

« Last Edit: April 08, 2012, 08:48:31 AM by Louise »

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #16 on: April 09, 2012, 07:33:16 PM »
Anybody have a link to a discussion of the format of alliterative poems, such a Beowulf? That, or maybe sprung rhythms, really seem to say "classical fantasy" to me, with kennings and the like, but it's been years since I tried to write one and I recall I wasn't good then.

EDIT: And, duh: try Wikipedia's "Alliterative Verse" page...

Though the question-and-answer form of the sonnet really does call out for a fantastic answer.... (The title is likely to be something awful like, "My friend married a lamia" or "On the Bride's Statuary".)
« Last Edit: April 09, 2012, 08:30:34 PM by Johnmc »
Terrible victim of Dunning-Kruger.

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #17 on: April 10, 2012, 02:55:48 PM »
I know this is terrible compared to those before it, but here goes anyway. As I'm sure you can tell, it's designed to be the poem at the start of a fantasy book that will tell you both the history and the prophesy. I have yet to come up with a name:-

Of five Gods
the first was stone
and from stone formed
our planet, Shrone


The second God
looked down on Shrone,
and granted Rain
to soften stone


To this cold Shrone
or stone and waves
by God of three
was gifted flames


The God of four
gave Shrone all life:
the deer, the elves,
man and his wife


The Jealous God
of number five
gave three dark lords
to end all lives

A Heroine
Fate will now send
for these great three's
dark reigns to end


Unfortunately not all of the rhymes work, but I'm putting that down to the language slowly changing over the years.
"To follow any path other than the Greater Good is to doom us all. Only together and with courage and discipline shall we stand victorious. Fight with fire and courage and nothing can stand against us" -Commander Shadowsun

Don't use big words when substituting diminutive vocabulary will suffice.

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #18 on: April 15, 2012, 09:23:43 AM »
I apologize for the lack of proper punctuation. I do hope it doesn't cause instant disqualifications. L


We can sing of it as an end
or we can sing of it as a new beginning  
Eyes of amethyst sparkling so keen
Speak like the stars twinkling.
Let the past melt away and with it its misery
Smile up at the sun and let it wash your fears clean
Under a mantle so black, beneath blankets of thought
Rest easy rest free my Dear fear not
I lay down my sword and shield at your feet to carry your pains upon me
Drop your head on my shoulder and awaken into a world of your starry dreams

And before I build my castle
Will you be my Queen?

Arise and raise your head to the east
Proud lady, do you see the darkness flee?
The mighty ball of fire burns against a drop of red 
Let a state of calm flow as you watch it journey to the west.
Heed not the dark clouds that foretell the rain,
All flames are made to die, but the Phoenix shall rise again.
The drops that touch upon us, a mere presence,
Awaken a chrysalis in slumber deep,
And like the butterfly that breaks out, 
So shall my desires and my dreams

Sweet one, rise to the throne
And command, with me, our kingdom unseen.


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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #19 on: April 18, 2012, 08:08:36 PM »
This is product of a bit of pre-history in regards to the project I am currently working on. This is my first poem ever written so here goes nothing.
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                 (Title) A Beginning

   The archer raised his mighty bow,
      And nocked his arrow, with unearthly glow.
With great speed he let it fly,
   An explosion of light filled the sky.

Far below upon the field,
   Where back and forth men clashed and reeled.
      The battle raged with no end in sight,
The young and old fought for right.

   The arrow fell its target found,
      Trailing light as it sought the ground.
As it neared it lit the plain,
   One among thousands, falling like rain.

The shafts pierced breasts of purest hearts,
   Felling the best, those evil glowing darts.
      Men went to the final darkness never again to rise,
None had expected Death in this guise.

   The battles lost, the heroes gone.
      This once great empire has its last dawn.
Upon those mounds where pure men died,
   Tiny saplings growing, were spied

In short order those sprouts grew tall,
   Glowing blue they reigned over all.
      From their tendrils mighty power spread,
Which could be used for Good or Dread.
« Last Edit: April 18, 2012, 08:10:10 PM by SincereReadingKW »
The pen is mightier than the sword, and considerably easier to write with.

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #20 on: April 26, 2012, 06:31:54 AM »
Here's a bardsong that may make it into a book that I'm writing. Hope you like it. First post and joined just to enter the contest!

The Hero's Task

The king of the world should've trusted his fears,
     for his subjects outnumber his warriors.
Conflicts now rise and the look in his eyes
     is surprise at to what he'll resort to.

Dividing them all is easy at first,
     saying one half steals from the other.
But to recall, the folly of all
     kings that fall is their hatred for brothers.

Kings can't connect with their subjects, you see
     and they can't see the plight of the poor.
Doing them right could've stopped this fight,
     but incited, they kick down his door.

A well sharpened blade and a serviceable spade
     can help end the problems you see to.
Just follow your heart and don't fear the start
     of the part of this journey before you.

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!)
« Reply #21 on: May 02, 2012, 09:03:35 PM »
And the contest is closed! (a bit late this month!) I'll put up the voting shortly. :)  Thanks to everyone for entering. ;D

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April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!) - Voting Now Open!
« Reply #22 on: May 03, 2012, 10:03:24 PM »
And voting is now open!  Good luck to all our contestants! :)

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Re: April 2012 Writing Challenge (Poetry!) - Voting Now Closed!
« Reply #23 on: May 31, 2012, 08:33:15 PM »
Voting is now closed.  And our winner is poochletty!  Congratulations! :)