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The Prince of Cats:Chapter 14-18
« on: March 30, 2020, 12:53:55 PM »
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Re: The Prince of Cats:Chapter 14-18
« Reply #1 on: April 08, 2020, 08:07:10 PM »
World building is strong as usual, but the pace has dropped to a near standstill. Jawad's seem to plan big, but rarely feels real as is evidenced by his capture and afterwards. Perhaps these sections can be abridged a bit to make the plot more taut.

Als to after such a gruesome torture, jawad is rumbling after some sleep feels off!
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Re: The Prince of Cats:Chapter 14-18
« Reply #2 on: April 11, 2020, 05:24:34 PM »
The romantic undertones seem a bit off to me I feel The romance needs a bigger build up between Jawad and Zaida the embracing each other scene seemed to come out of nowhere but that’s just me.
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